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Freya

By martib
Little trip out to Elvaston Castle with my daughter to take a few shots to add to her portfolio. This was taken in quite sunny conditions with hi speed sync flash off to my right. Still messing around with flash but quite like this shot.

Tags: Outdoor portrait Portraits and people Hi speed flash

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Chrism8 13 940 26 England
31 Oct 2019 5:48PM
Nicely balanced

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31 Oct 2019 7:13PM
Beautifuly done!

Arne Smile
pablophotographer 8 1.5k 368
31 Oct 2019 8:26PM
Hi. I think the image has some issues and some stylistic flaws and does not help promoting your daughter's career.

I consider the horizontal space occupied by your signature a missused opportunity which could be used at the bottom of the frame to display her legs a bit more. She is your priority here.

I am not against avoiding to look at the lens when modelling for clothes so the blank gaze is fine. But both hands hanging down parallel to the torso is a pose that cries out "inflexible"and "inexperienced". This can change od course with the help of a prop, offer her to hold a bag, a flower, a hat. Or if you have none available ask her to bend the elbow and place her hand on jer waist.

If I had seen this image in a fashion magazine I would expect references to the top but mainly her skirt. But look at the geometric pattern of the skirt and compare the strict vertical and horizontal lines with the uneven length of her hair ends. Bad match. Where are my Scissors????!!!!. Then similarly, arrange the hair either front or back but not with stray hair over the shoulders as adidas foot ball kit shirt.

I would ask her study poses from fashion magazines while you train your eye to pick up details that potentially can make or break a shot. You will both benefit from it.

Wishing her good luck with her dreams, she is a good looking young lady, you should be proud as her dad.

pablophotographer

31 Oct 2019 8:46PM

Quote:Hi. I think the image has some issues and some stylistic flaws and does not help promoting your daughter's career.

I consider the horizontal space occupied by your signature a missused opportunity which could be used at the bottom of the frame to display her legs a bit more. She is your priority here.

I am not against avoiding to look at the lens when modelling for clothes so the blank gaze is fine. But both hands hanging down parallel to the torso is a pose that cries out "inflexible"and "inexperienced". This can change od course with the help of a prop, offer her to hold a bag, a flower, a hat. Or if you have none available ask her to bend the elbow and place her hand on jer waist.

If I had seen this image in a fashion magazine I would expect references to the top but mainly her skirt. But look at the geometric pattern of the skirt and compare the strict vertical and horizontal lines with the uneven length of her hair ends. Bad match. Where are my Scissors????!!!!. Then similarly, arrange the hair either front or back but not with stray hair over the shoulders as adidas foot ball kit shirt.

I would ask her study poses from fashion magazines while you train your eye to pick up details that potentially can make or break a shot. You will both benefit from it.

Wishing her good luck with her dreams, she is a good looking young lady, you should be proud as her dad.

pablophotographer




Wow!! Thank you for taking your time to observe and comment on this shot. Your comments are valid and taken on board, as much as my daughter loves to be in front of the camera she does struggle a little to decide on poses... this was just a shot that I really liked, we had no hair and makeup staff available today haha! Iíve told her plenty of times to explore the internet for her poses... sheís getting there. Thank you anyway for your critique

Martin
pablophotographer 8 1.5k 368
1 Nov 2019 3:19PM
I am surprised that her bag contains no brush!
1 Nov 2019 6:03PM

Quote:I am surprised that her bag contains no brush!


Iím surprised youíre carrying on commenting...

Sheís a 15 year old who wanted me to take some photos of her, yes her hair couldíve been perfect but itís not, we were outside, there was a bit of a breeze, the ladies from hair and makeup refused to step outside as it was a bit chilly, Margaret has terrible arthritis and said the cold would play havoc with her joints, Charlene from wardrobe couldnít make it to the shoot as her boyfriendís mums goldfish was struggling to breathe and they had to take it to the vet... so poor old Freya had to manage her own hair and wardrobe, Iím sorry that itís not up to your fashion photography standard, however I quite like this shot and so do a few others. Iíll accept constructive criticism after all thatís what we want to help produce better images, however pablophotographer I think you can stop with your comments now.

Have a nice day
GeorgeP Plus
12 57 25 United States
3 Nov 2019 3:18AM
Lots of practical comments above if your daughter keeps an interest in modeling. I just like the shot - and If her interest changes to medicine, computers, accounting, sales, business, aviation, music, art or whatever, this is a portrait that won't make her cringe if it is dragged out some time in the future.
pablophotographer 8 1.5k 368
6 Nov 2019 4:19PM
My second message has a humourous tone Martin. I am sorry to hear of her troubles and I wish her illness progresses very slowly and lets her enjoy her life without interfering with the options she has ahead.

I am just outside hospital to see my consultant, life is full of challenges for all.

Keep well
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