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Girl in Venice 2

By HelenaJ
Another dreamy photo of my daughter.

Tags: Architecture Landscape and travel Portraits and people

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JackAllTog Plus
7 4.4k 58 United Kingdom
8 Oct 2011 9:29AM
And anoher lovely image created. I nice elegant outfit too with all those beads.

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TRUEX 9 218 10
8 Oct 2011 9:38AM
I assume this was a holiday photo? and not a shoot.

I like it anyway, comp is ok, I would have asked her to turn her head a little bit more towards us. It's a shame you couldn't get that lovely low evening sun we can see on the side of the domes onto her,was there a building in between her and the sun perhaps?.

Could be a bit sharper, but I don't know what type of camera that is.

LikeGrin
CathR 9 151 564 United Kingdom
8 Oct 2011 9:40AM
This is a well exposed image Helena and depth of field is good too. Not so sure about the composition. There is a rule in portrait photography that the person should not look out of the frame becuase it leads the eye of the viewer out of the picture. I try not to trot out these rules unthinkingly because there are always exceptions and rules are meant to be broken. But I think it does matter here possibly because you have the buildings on the other side of the pic. I am interested in them, so my eye wants to explore in that direction. On the other hand there is a strong inclination to follow the eyes of the person, which takes me in the other direction, so the composition does not fit together well as a whole.

But otherwise it's a pleasing pic, which creates a certain mood of the place.

Best wishes

Catherine
banehawi Plus
12 1.5k 3510 Canada
8 Oct 2011 9:56PM
Its a nice effort. You daughter however is underexposed as you shot against the sky, and using either fill flash or positive exposure compensation you have a much better shot. When the exposure is sorted out, she also has the nice warm glow you see on the buildings

The pose is framed too far to the right and the top to be really spot on composition, and this is easily rectified with some cropping, and adding some height to place her on a third.

The shot is a little soft overall, and gets gradually softer closer to her head, so some selective sharpening also improves the overall shot.


Ive loaded a mod to show what I mean,


Hope this is helpful,



regards


Willie
Paintman Plus
10 1.1k 177 United Kingdom
9 Oct 2011 7:15PM
In the mod I got rid of as much chromatic aberration as I could using ACR ( Adobe Camera Raw ). The sky looks as if it has had areas cloned which show up as lighter streaks and patches, particularly under the nose and mouth and behind the tied up hair. To sort this out I used a mask to mask out the girl and buildings and produced a new layer with a sky blue to horizon yellow and replaced the sky.

I increased the contrast and darkened the buildings. I increased the contrast of the girl and her dress then lightened up her face to simulate a light source similar to that on the buildings.

I finally sharpened the girl and to a lesser extent the buildings.

Alan.
HelenaJ 5 3
10 Oct 2011 8:24PM
I really appreciate all your help and suggestions. I am learning such a lot from using this website - its brilliant. Cant send private messages yet - not been with it for a month, but this is so helpful. Thank you all.

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