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Hairbands

By ivonjunaidi
usually before goes to shower, women always uses towel for her hair.

Tags: Black and white

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mrswoolybill Plus
13 1.9k 2165 United Kingdom
30 Dec 2014 4:43PM
Strange, I've never used a towel on my hair before the shower... But I love the way the light catches the edge of the towel, framing her profile.

That's part of the mystery here. I like this a lot, there seems to be a brief pause while she considers what to do next. We are following the line of her eyes although we cannot really see them. That makes us imagine what she is looking at. There are hints, light catching jumbled surfaces, just enough detail.

A grab shot I suspect, taken on the spur of the moment. You were lucky to get such a good result at 1/20 second. But it did work.

I want to rotate a bit clockwise - that vertical edge is so strong that it needs to be true to hold things together; and I really want to crop a slice off the left side. Space behind a head is almost always wasted space and here it dilutes the impact of the composition by drawing the viewer's eye away from the direction that really matters, on the right.

I'm not sure about the hint of green toning. I'd like to try a straight b&w, I think it would look cleaner. But that's a matter of personal taste.

Modification to follow, I hope.
Moira

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30 Dec 2014 4:58PM
TQ , Moira
dudler Plus
16 1.1k 1599 England
30 Dec 2014 7:47PM
I haven't got a lot to add to what Moira has said already: I would like to have had the woman's head a little further to the left, so that it is clear of the various objects in the background on the right, and not so central. Moira's first mod deals with one half of this.

Grab shots are always risky - and, in cases like this, the risk is worth taking. A good result!
paulbroad 12 131 1288 United Kingdom
31 Dec 2014 10:38AM
For me, you heed a considerable left side crop to move the head well to the left, then you need more of the face in profile. The latter you cannot change at this stage.

There is a good idea here, but the timing is wrong.

Paul

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