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hurry up and take it pleaseeee.

By rayjac
If anyone can advise on how to inprove on this image, or tell me were I am going wrong.
It was a sheet over the door job and a Sony dslr a100, kit lens, focal length 70.0mm,exposure 1/125, aperture f/5-6, iso 400, flash, metering mode matrix.
I think it's not too bad for a first time at people photography, but I know it could be better.

Tags: Portraits and people

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DRicherby 7 269 725 United Kingdom
29 Sep 2010 9:29PM
Cool ear-rings! Grin

You have good eye contact here and nice catchlights in the eyes. I like the off-centre pose, too, but I think your model ought to be a bit bigger in the frame. I see two problems: exposure and the background.

The photo is significantly under-exposed. The histogram stops at 75% brightness, where 0% is pure black and 100% is pure white. Check the histogram on the back of the camera after you shoot: for most scenes, the graph should reach right the way across the scale, without bunching up at either end. (Exceptions are when you're photographing something very dark or very bright, where the full range of brightness isn't present in the scene so shouldn't be in your photograph, either.) If the histogram doesn't come close to the right-hand edge, you're under-exposing so increase the exposure and try again until you're filling most of the scale.

The background is plain but it's messy. Iron your sheet and hang it so it doesn't crease. Increasing the distance between your model and the sheet will throw it at least somewhat out of focus so its texture won't show up as much.

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paulbroad 8 114 1034 United Kingdom
30 Sep 2010 8:41AM
All said above, plus the obvious one that your title suggests - she looks pleasant, but not entirely happy. The mods both improve the image dramatically, but for very basic portraiture, you are often better outdoor where people relax more and easy backgrounds are available.

However, the main problem to master is exposure, and regularly checking your LCD is one of the great advantages that the digital SLR has over film.

paul
Sooty_1 6 1.5k 219 United Kingdom
30 Sep 2010 9:44PM
Yep, as noted above, move the model away from the background, and try to get the background smooth.
You need at least a stop more exposure, and preferably diffuse the flash which will be more flattering to the model.
NeilWigan Plus
6 12 15 England
6 Oct 2010 10:07AM
hello not heard from you for some days hope all ok.
11 Oct 2010 1:10PM
i agree with the above comments but anther one i would like to add is have fun with your models by talking to them and getting them to laugh ! a relaxed model is a happy model, love shot keep at it

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