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By EKMitchell
Currently experimenting with my final piece for A-Level Photography, this is the first version of 1 of 4 photographs I'll be submitting in the exam, I'm very proud of it and feel as though I've come a long way since starting my course 2 years ago.

I took the photo outside by a pile of with my boyfriend holding a silver reflector as she was stood in the shadows, this unfortunately made the original image look bad but after some editing I think it turned out okay


Tags: Robot Smoke Industry Digitally manipulated Portraits and people

Voters: PhilT2, bluesandtwos, NevP and 6 more


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PhilT2 Plus
12 594 35 England
18 Apr 2016 4:10PM
A powerful expressive image which I like. However, the reflection on the hair band is distracting from the eyes and I think it would look better toned down. The same goes for the reflection on the thumb. Otherwise I think it is extremely good work
pablophotographer 11 2.0k 429
18 Apr 2016 4:31PM
Hi you can get More opinion and advice by uploading to the critique gallery
18 Apr 2016 7:13PM
I agree with you about the reflection, I'm going to fix that by using the brush tool with opacity turned down to just dull the brightness, I want the face to be the focus of this image (I'm also going to make the face silver instead of blue)

I talked this image through with my teacher and the photography technician after I'd finished it and he's given me lots of advice and help with how I can drastically improve it when I edit it again in my exam, I was just uploading it here because I was proud of it as I've come a long way in a couple years (though I still have a lot further to go!), but thank you anyway Smile
pablophotographer 11 2.0k 429
18 Apr 2016 11:08PM
As far as I know people who care about their craft are keen in learning more about it;
One can never know enough, so it's good to help each other,
I was not able to write my opinion on your pic earlier.
Mono conversion has helped it become a solidified strong mix but I think it misses an element to make it even stronger. People sometimes have an issue with the hands in the pictures, they may complain there is a hand missing or fingers are cropped just for the sake of it. I shall not moan because one hand is out of the frame but will tell you instead you could have it in the frame, participating in your industrious effort. How? You could be holding an old shutter release cable which intertwined with the rest of the cables does ''puff'' and the smoke gets made. Result?
Kindly,
pablophotographer
TanyaH Plus
19 1.3k 411 United Kingdom
19 Apr 2016 4:30PM
Shiny hair, I have no issue with, because it kind of makes it feel alive; nor do I really notice the reflection on the thumb Smile
The one bit that I'd personally tone down a fraction, if it was mine, is the gold in the more prominent goggle eye thingy on top of her head.

Whatever else you do to this and however you change it, please don't change the intense sheen and and luminious quality of those eyes ... they're what I see first, because they're rather mesmerising, even though they're a small part of the whole image. (They also remind me of a book I read that's now been turned into a film ... The Host by Stephanie Meyer.)

Good for you, though! You're right to be proud of this image, irrespective of what anyone else says.

Best of luck with the exam Smile

Tanya


dudler Plus
19 1.9k 1947 England
19 Apr 2016 6:45PM
This is weird and very effective.

There are two ways to go about getting views - the more the better, and mull over the good bits in all of them (recognising that no single person is always right): or follow one approach, and don't try to mix and match bits and pieces of advice.

The latter is especialyl important when you are getting advice on a technical issue!

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