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Just another yellow field.

By Paulbee
Surrounded by yellow fields every spring its difficult to resist trying to make something of them.

Tags: Perspective Walks Rapeseed Landscape and travel Yellow fields Field path

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IshanPathak Plus
1 202 12 India
19 Jun 2014 12:48PM
A Lovely shot.

The yellow fields look over sharpened, and has lost its natural look. ( Personal opinion )

Also, if possible, i would have preferred a straighter alignment.

I would have took 2 steps to my right, and would have told the person to walk just a bit towards the left, instraight to that narrow gap.

Ishan

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mikbee 8 3 8 Scotland
19 Jun 2014 3:21PM
Good colours Paul.
And as you have this for a critique,
all I can say is perhaps the figure is a bit too central in the frame !!
Mick.
mrswoolybill Plus
9 841 1372 United Kingdom
19 Jun 2014 5:11PM
First of all the things that work for me. The dark blue clothing complements the yellow flowers perfectly, the figure is good and sharp, and there's a nice sense of movement in the feet - the raised foot is particularly effective. There's a path to explore, it leads into the distance and it follows a diagonal which is good.

There are two very interesting suggestions above, and really they are part and parcel of the same question - the composition isn't really satisfactory. The path heads away to the left, the figure seems to be moving straight forward and the focal point in the distance is the detail top right. So the viewer isn't really sure which way to explore the frame.

Ishan's Modification removes the distractions on the 'horizon' at the top of the frame and focuses attention better on the figure. Mick;'s comment about central placement is also apt though - placing your subject in the middle of the frame tends to give a static, fixed feel. Movement is conveyed better by a subject on one side, moving into the frame.

As Mick says, stepping a couple of steps to the right would have given you a better composition. A crop can address that to some extent.

In the West, because we read (images as well as text) from left to right we expect to see movement happening in that direction. So I would also try flipping this horizontally.

Finally I suspect that this is slightly underexposed, it looks a wee bit dull and flat on the yellow flowers. I'd like to see more of a citrus zing there. A simple Levels adjustment should sort that.

Modification to follow, I hope...
Moira
paulbroad 8 108 988 United Kingdom
19 Jun 2014 8:21PM
Well done in general. So much Rapeseed this year. Not good for the hay fever sufferer. I would crop the horizon down to the top of the flowers and go for a more off centre composition. The classic Rape field shot has the model wearing red, the strongest possible colour to go with all that yelliw.

Paul
pamelajean Plus
10 949 1785 United Kingdom
19 Jun 2014 11:52PM
My first thought was to remove the bit at the top and just have the frame filled with the rape, and I see that this has already been suggested above.

So I have done a simple modification with the rape extended upwards.
I cropped square and placed the figure two thirds across the frame.
You may feel that it's now too simple, just the figure and the field, but sometimes less is more.
I also cloned out the bottom of the white shirt that shows beneath the jacket line, as my eye kept being drawn to it.

Pamela.
banehawi Plus
11 1.3k 3349 Canada
20 Jun 2014 2:06AM
A nice shot.

Uploaded a mod; its quite similar to Ishans actually apart from the crop. Its a 10 X 8; colour temp is warmer; yellow saturation is lower.


Regards


Willie
Paulbee Plus
11 41 United Kingdom
20 Jun 2014 9:31AM
Thanks foe the Mods everybody. The foreground flowers were sharpened in High Pass. I agree losing the horizon is an improvement. My own main criticism is that the ground was too flat to give a good perspective of the path . Ideally I would like to have been ten feet up in the air on a ladder to take this pic!

Regards Paul.
dudler Plus
12 349 668 England
20 Jun 2014 7:41PM
Yes, i agree: the composition could live with some zapping up.

My own thought is move left, and get the path, the endge of the field and the foreground into a strong zig-zag.

My crop may suggest the sort of thing, I hope.

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