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By shadowman6866
Really not sure what to call this one but I was never much good at comming up with titles for my work so if you have any suggestions im open. Got bored and decided to do some more smoke trails, decided to get a bit more creative with it this time. I cleaned it up a bit and I hope it is bright enough. All comments are welcome.

Tags: Specialist and abstract Digitally manipulated Smoke trails

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paulbroad 10 123 1238 United Kingdom
17 Sep 2013 8:41AM
Clear and tidy. Otherwise as before. Not an abstract fan, but these lift themselves above much of what we see.


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pamelajean Plus
12 1.1k 2007 United Kingdom
18 Sep 2013 12:45PM
They look bright enough to me, and you have left good space around the smoke abstracts.

You say that you have tried to be more creative, Tracy, and I applaud the results you are achieving, but these are getting more elaborate each time, which I am not sure is a good idea because a more clearly defined shape or pattern will be easier for the viewer to accept and appreciate. Any image with numerous differing elements will confuse the eye and have the viewer seeking for a prominent element upon which to focus. Simplicity is the key to strengthening your compositions. Distinct compositions simplify yet enhance the delivery of your idea. Simple in this context doesn’t mean simplistic, but rather lacking unnecessary elements that confuse or are redundant.

V1: "Kaleidoscope" is the correct spelling. Because there are two strong faces in this one, I feel it needs to be in a vertical format. Pretty scary now, reminding me of the old film "Night of the Demon". In my modification I have flipped it and cropped off some of the surrounding black. My second modification has a crop to the bottom, making the demon more obvious....the message, in my opinion, is now being clearly presented instead of having to be searched for. I realise you are now putting some of these together in four parts, but there is no reason why some of that symmetry can't be cut off if it produces something better.

V2: V2 is equally impressive, but I'm not "seeing" anything that speaks to me in this one. My modification simply turns the image and crops the outside again.

V3: This is my favourite of the three, for its simplicity, probably because it's two images instead of four. I see a bat at the top but, more importantly, two animal heads with mouths open, like roaring leopards or some other big cats. The whiskers are there, the teeth and the eyes, and what I at first saw as the bat's wings at the top, now become the cat's ears. This is strong, and is why I like it. At first, I thought the bit at the bottom was irrelevant, but am now undecided, because I think it grounds the rest of the image. In my first modification I did a square crop, and in my second I removed the bottom part, then eliminated a few bits which spoilt the idea of the two big cats.

Maybe there are a few ideas there for you to think about.
This is nice work. What you do with your results is ultimately what makes them interesting to others.


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