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Keep Quiet

By shoguntofu
Taken with a mobile phone. Minimal editing in Snapseed. Taken from a funeral service.

Tags: Black and white Black and white

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mrswoolybill Plus
14 2.5k 2345 United Kingdom
4 Jul 2020 6:04PM
Hello again, it's good to see you back. You have a really good eye for subject and composition, this has a lot going for it. Even without knowing that this is a funeral, I saw sadness and loss. I'm fascinated by the man's hands, he looks like a drummer without his drum kit. And he is gazing at the French horn as though it represents an absent friend.

I also like the fact that you composed this to include the curves of the two chair-backs, left and right. That gives a satisfying completeness.

You like dark images in black & white, it would be interesting to see the original. You faced a couple of serious technical problems and it's helpful to be aware of these when taking a photograph. There is bright light bouncing off the shiny instrument which really messes with the device's 'brain'; and the man's face is in shadow, exacerbated by the fact that he is wearing a cap.

I have added a modification for which I added a bit of exposure overall but then used the burn tool (local darkening) very gently on the instrument to give it more bulk. Increased exposure reveals the man's face a little better, and I think it adds to the emotion. But it does also show up the results of the very slow shutter speed. You held this reasonably steady, but 1/10 second is just way too slow to photograph people who are getting on with their lives. There is motion blur, in the man's face and his hands. In the hands it's acceptable, but the face needs to be sharper. That's where the emotional contact is.

I note that you feel you cannot afford a DSLR. My own feeling is that if you want to push your photography further, particularly in the difficult light conditions that you favour, you could aim to look for a second hand camera that would allow you to take greater control. But there are aspects of this scene that would make it challenging for any camera.
chase Plus
15 2.0k 517 England
5 Jul 2020 10:46AM
It is a nice record image of the proceedings and the people but, very contrasty and the bright catchlights on the instrument do pull the viewers eye somewhat.
Moiras mod has improved this well.
The very slow shutter speed has resulted in lots of blur, especially when hand holding, even something light and small like your phone.
As Moira has suggested, to cope with difficult lighting situations, a DSLR is the way forward.
dudler Plus
17 1.5k 1777 England
5 Jul 2020 11:39AM
Creative, yes - and also technically challenged by the low light level. I have a feeling that we've commented on this before.

So I'll add a third vote to the idea that a camera is a really good idea - you can get a decent older body and lens for a couple of hundred pounds.

But if that is genuinely beyond your reach, I suggest shooting with more light. Mobiles are not at their best in low light, and you will be able to develop your creative side better on a sound technical base. You need to know that the technology will function, and not let you down. I wrote an article about using mobiles for serious pictures a while back - you can see it HERE.

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