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By Abdelrazek
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I am an armature photographer mostly interested in landscape and wildlife photography, appreciate constructive criticism

Tags: Nature Animals Texture Zebra Wildlife and nature

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2 Jan 2011 8:32AM
Excellent Captur well dune

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paulbroad 9 117 1077 United Kingdom
2 Jan 2011 8:43AM
The bars are very very insistant and drag the attention. Only one of the animals is showing it's head, then not all of it. You needed to be much closer to just a single head, then have that fully in view.

Paul
2 Jan 2011 8:55AM
A wonderful idea here but I think the foreground a bit too complicated with no real 'contact' with any particular animal. I think it would have paid off to wait for them to move until you had only a single animal posed against the background stripes . This would increase the strength of the animal stripes and lessen the insistence of the background cage. Well worth another try. A
davey_griffo 7 213 165 England
2 Jan 2011 9:52AM
This is the first time I've seen the cage in any captive animal shot made to work. A great idea, & one I wouldn't have thought of. I'd have tried to make them look like they were on the plains of Africa, by excluding the fence.

I agree that one zebra may have made a stronger image, or perhaps if you'd got the heads of the other 2.
iancatch 9 4 45 England
2 Jan 2011 4:16PM
This is a great idea using the natural and man made stripes. However there are a few things that would improve things; some I have done in my mod.

Firstly this is crying out to be turned mono, secondly the image was unbalanced from top to bottom so I have cropped it to a letter box format.

Things I couldnt put right was that the image needs at least one of the zebra heads to be whole otherwise there is no focal point. You also needed a smaller aperture to give you a larger depth of field as the front zebra is out of focus.

Its also worth remembering that you could hang around a little longer to see if that better shot in terms of comp comes along. I recently spent 90mins in front of the zebra compound at the South Yourkshire Wildlife Park waiting for that perfect comp and eventually ended up getting a head shot of mother and foul together (see my pf).

Hope this has been useful and really like the idea behind the shot.

regards

Ian
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2 Jan 2011 8:42PM
i like the idea of making an abstract of ther shapes and lines and to some extent this is working here, much has been said already.

i like the mod with the crop and mono conversion that has been done above and consequently have marked that as good critique.

i would say however that to work really well the image needs to be sharp from the front and in this example the point of focus begins in the middle zone and behind.

i have seen some really excellent examples of abstracts from groups of zebras and often the secret is including less of each but having at least one part recognisable as you have done here with the head. i think including any other colour but black or white would be to detract from the strength of the image even though the shapes of the bars are acceptable as a contrast they would be better rendered in mono.

regards
Phil

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