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By LouiseTopp  
Hi can you tell me how this can be improved pleae?

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ddolfelin Plus
10 103 3 Wales
12 Mar 2017 11:45AM
No I can't.
Looks brilliant to me.
mrswoolybill Plus
15 3.2k 2519 United Kingdom
12 Mar 2017 11:53AM
Hi Louise, good to see you uploading in the Critique Gallery again!

It's a great subject for an abstract, just light and lines, who needs anything more? I have various ideas for ways of photographing it, I assume that it is something that you can go back to - but so far as this upload is concerned my main advice would be to go easy on the sharpening!

Have a careful look at the thin blueish lines running along the lower edge of each band, particularly near the centre of the frame - the lines are breaking up into little 'steps'. That is a sign of over-sharpening, and once you notice it, it becomes quite intrusive and annoying.

Assuming that you can go back to the subject, this is something that needs cool formality. I would suggest you either go for for perfect horizontals, or rotate the camera for diagonals. And then consider a square crop. Your portrait frame draws the eye upwards, which creates a nice tension with the not-quite horizontals. But square leaves the eye free to bounce around inside the frame.
Moira
mrswoolybill Plus
15 3.2k 2519 United Kingdom
12 Mar 2017 12:05PM
Modification added, as a suggestion - and I'm sorry, I had forgotten you are Aura!
banehawi Plus
17 2.7k 4307 Canada
12 Mar 2017 3:18PM
This is a good base for a lot of experimentation, and could be a very nice abstract print.


Ive shown one possibility in the mod. Its rotated, brightness increased, cropped, a number of different colour tones applied, graduated dark to light, bottom to top, and a frame.

The file size is quite small which could also contribute to tose jagged edges, - I left them in the mod and added a lens flare


Regards


Willie
LouiseTopp 11 635 United Kingdom
12 Mar 2017 4:30PM

Quote:Hi Louise, good to see you uploading in the Critique Gallery again


Thanks, I have just uploaded a friends copy of Photoshop Elements 11 as I can't afford Lightroom or photoshop (the other one) as I'm strapped for cash (10 per month is quite expensive for me at the moment) I am going to upload some other photo's Smile
mrswoolybill Plus
15 3.2k 2519 United Kingdom
12 Mar 2017 4:48PM
Elements 11 is what I use most of the time, plus the Nik Collection which you can download for free from Google. Together they do everything that I want (and offer a lot more that I don't use)
LouiseTopp 11 635 United Kingdom
12 Mar 2017 5:02PM
That's good to know, I can ask if I get stuck har har.
paulbroad Plus
14 131 1294 United Kingdom
14 Mar 2017 9:47AM
For me, as most will guess, it lacks a focal point and thus interest to hold the viewer. more of a stock background image than a stand alone.

Paul
dudler Plus
18 1.9k 1928 England
14 Mar 2017 6:45PM
I'd love to see a vertical line in this, and maybe a single other something, on one of the right hand thirds - this would deal with Paul's concern, and set off the repetitive pattern here.

Close to excellence, I'd say. (And beware oversharpening!)

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