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Lucy in High Key

By MrsB    
Lucy is my friend's grandaughter. She wanted an informal photoshoot. This was my first attempt at anything studio related. Lucy has the most beautiful eyes and I felt an image in high key would show off her peepers in an up to date style.

Tags: Black and white Child photography Portraits and people

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mohikan22 16 2.3k 2 United Kingdom
27 Apr 2017 6:11PM
WOW mesmerising!

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banehawi Plus
15 2.2k 4094 Canada
27 Apr 2017 6:13PM
It worked quite well.


Ive tried a brighter, higher key approach, eyes sharper and more colour, leveled and cropped.

See what you think.



Regards


Willie
dudler Plus
16 1.1k 1599 England
27 Apr 2017 6:15PM
Welcome to Ephotozine, Linda, and particularly to the critique gallery. I see that you joined the community today, and you've already uploaded six pictures - three of which are of Lucy!

In the critique gallery you don't get votes or awards, but you should get some thoughtful suggestions for alternatives (and possibly even improvements).

Eyes like hers are a natural subject for high key pictures. Looking at the EXIF date or, you will obviously working in natural light, leading to a high ISO setting. Working at f/2.8 limits depth of field, and you might have been okay with a slightly slower shutter speed.

I'm confused by the lens: it looks like the standard EOS lens, but you're using it on a Sony. I wonder what the story is...

I'm not sure whether ears add to this, so I'm going to do a modification cropping tighter. I may also try and monochrome conversion. Click on the blue modifications button below your picture on the left and click on the numbers.

Looking at your portfolio as a whole I'm really looking forward to seeing more of your work soon.
dark_lord Plus
16 2.5k 632 England
27 Apr 2017 7:40PM
Welcome from me too.

I agree cropping in closer would make more of the eyes, which is what inspired you to take this going by your description.

However, it's also good to see the eyes in context, and considering John's I'd pull back just a little so the ears aren't quite so close to the frame edge. A bit of breathing space, less claustrophobic.
mrswoolybill Plus
13 1.9k 2166 United Kingdom
28 Apr 2017 8:42AM
A warm welcome from me too, I hope you will find the Critique Gallery useful.

This is one of the most engaging and original portraits I have seen in the CG, well done for thinking outside the box. It's all about clear-eyed youth, open and fresh. I'm sure Lucy will be delighted.

I have added my own modification. The thing that we have all wanted to change is to get rid of those hints of ear shape at the sides of the frame. The reason I think is that they draw the viewer's eyes away from the central area, Lucy's eyes, which are so very beautiful.

Normally I advise that in a portrait the eyes are best placed about 1/3 down from the top of the frame, because that places them comfortably on the viewer's eye-level. But here that expanse of smooth, young, delicately freckled forehead seems important, so I have cropped to your proportions allowing that area to remain. This places the pupils on the lower third.

I lightened overall very slightly, then used the dodge and burn tools very gently on the eyes to add sparkle.

And then, because the skin is so pale that I found the hint of pink almost intrusive, I converted the rest of the image, everything apart from the eyes, to be&w. I very rarely touch selective colour, it generally seems self-consciously 'Look what I've learnt to do'... But it works for me here.

I hope we shall see more from you!
Moira
pablophotographer 8 1.5k 368
28 Apr 2017 10:26AM
Hi, welcome from me too.
I do not get the feeling that her eye colour is the one displayed in any of the pictures and despite being the most prominent and important issue I shall leave it aside.
I get the impression that the ear we see on the left is ''clipped'', whereas the ear we see on the right is fully visible.
The wide aperture of f/2.8 kept everything behind in blur but the sense of depth could be emphasised more strongly should she had let her hair down filling the space behind her ears, it seems that her hair have been pulled back and put up in a pony tail. The contrast of darker background and lighter foreground would have offered another dimension to it.
Kindly,
pablophotographer
Robert51 11 7 96 United Kingdom
28 Apr 2017 3:03PM
Great shot which is never easy with high key images. The mod is just to give you some more ideas for the image.

A big welcome from me also...

Robert
paulbroad 12 131 1288 United Kingdom
28 Apr 2017 3:29PM
This is nice and very well done. Cropping closer looses the points which set the high key approach - faint hair and ears. I like what you have done. The eyes could b a tiny bit crisper although I'm not sure more contrast is needed.

Nice to see proper high key, not just someone printing it light and assuming that means high key.

Paul
MrsB 2
28 Apr 2017 5:35PM
Thank you so much for your comments. I am very grateful for both the positive and the constructive feedback. It means a lot to me as I can have it in my mind each time I do more portrait work.

Thank you also to those who have made some modifications. I'm hard pressed to choose between them as I actually like them all! It's wonderful to see someone else's interpretation of my work.

I will keep posting.

With kindest regards
Linda
mrswoolybill Plus
13 1.9k 2166 United Kingdom
28 Apr 2017 5:44PM
Thanks for your feedback, it's lovely when we hear back from 'customers'. You are right, the Critique Gallery really is about seeing one's work through other people's eyes. We try to give ideas, suggestions, for people to consider carrying forward.
Moira
dudler Plus
16 1.1k 1599 England
29 Apr 2017 6:39AM
I'll second that - the Critique Gallery is best when there's a conversation!

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