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Monument

By das_amq25  
Monument Malang City, precisely in the province of East Java Indonesia

Tags: Landscape and travel mounument

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27 Mar 2017 6:56PM
This is a nice capture of the monument, although there are a few things that could be improved - I've uploaded a mod with a few changes to consider.
The composition was looking a little too plain, with the monument right in the centre of the frame, so I've cropped to put it off centre. The rising tree line to the right helps to balance the composition in the new crop and the eye follows it down to the monument (so I prefer cutting off the left of the image rather than the right).
Its an overcast day, so you've got good soft lighting on the monument, however the sky is very bright and this draws the eye away from it. I've selectively darkened the sky with a levels adjustment layer and a layer mask. I also darkened around the edges of the frame and brightened the monument a little, all to try and make the eye go to the monument more naturally.
banehawi Plus
17 2.5k 4272 Canada
28 Mar 2017 1:00AM
Nice. Loaded a mod. It needs a +1 exposure compensation as the brighter sky made the important details a bit dark.
mrswoolybill Plus
14 3.0k 2462 United Kingdom
28 Mar 2017 9:30AM
Hi Daniel, welcome to the Critique Gallery, this is just your second upload on the site and your first for critique. I hope you have had a look at the site, and know what we are about here; and that you'll find it useful!

Two things jumped out at me when I opened this. First that the effect is a little dull, flat. Including a lot of sky and water in a shot will often confuse the camera's 'brain' into underexposing slightly, it'a worth checking out the exposure compensation control and trying a few variations - try +0.7 and +1 as well as without compensation, check out the results, compare the histograms. Don't forget to zero the setting after you have finished!

Secondly the column is very nearly but not quite central. It's the not quite bit that doesn't work. This needs to be perfectly symmetrical, for a formal look, or comfortably off-centre for a more relaxed feel. Tom has uploaded an off-centre crop, I have uploaded symmetrical for the alternative. (To view modifications, click on the blue Modifications button below your image, then on the numbers to view).

For my modification I made several simple changes. What you can do will depend on your software, but any editing program will allow some adjustment of light. I lightened shadows and darkened highlights slightly, then added brightness, then used the dodge and burn tools at low exposure, set respectively to highlights and shadows, over the pond surface. That gives a more 3-dimensional effect, a sense of depth.

You are using a program setting, in due course I hope that you will aim to take a little bit more control.
Moira
dudler Plus
18 1.7k 1879 England
28 Mar 2017 2:01PM
And welcome from me, too, Daniel.

This is a decent record, and the technical side works fine (though as you develop as a photographer, you may want to take back more control, and use Aperture priority rather than Program, and manual white balance, so that you decide precisely how the picture looks).

My main thought with this is hwo to make a picture that is both recognisably of the place, and also different from everyone else's: I think the reflection may be the key.

One approach, which Moira has been known to use, is to isolate the reflection, and invert it - really playing with reality. You may need more of the column reflected for this to work best: so I've trimmed heavily, and made the picture a little about the column, more about the banners, and mostly about the water lilies...

What do you make of it (and the other mods)?
Robert51 12 7 124 United Kingdom
28 Mar 2017 2:47PM
A big welcome and I can only echo the above.

The mod I wanted to be more vibrant. I have straightened the Monument and added a little edge darkening. I also brought the vibrance up to give that feeling of celebration.

Look forward to seeing lots more of your pictures...

Robert
dark_lord Plus
17 2.8k 784 England
28 Mar 2017 9:51PM
Welcome from me too.

Good suggestions and modifications above.

It's a fair record and no less valuable as an image because of that.
However, it does look flat. If it's local to you, think about revisiting when it's lit by lower angled and softer early or evening light (whichever is more appropriate for the location and viewpoint).
23 Jul 2017 3:58AM
Thanks for tom_earwaker, banehawi, mrswoolybill, dudler, Robert51, and
Dark_lord for his criticism and suggestions. Regards to know for all.

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