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Motorcycle girl.

By WimpyIskandar
Taken at late afternoon with remote flash,at a parking yard where is the motor cycle dealer seliing their product.

dear TEAM Critique,
Pls critique the lighting effect dan compositition,
Thks n Rgds

Tags: Portraits and people

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Beautiful.....

Peter

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5 Apr 2013 3:30AM
Trabajo bien logrado.
5 Apr 2013 3:49AM
dear Peter,Gallero,thkz for your respond and appreciation.rgds
gwynn56 4 87 England
5 Apr 2013 5:09AM
very nice Smile
5 Apr 2013 5:26AM
dear Gwynn56,Thkz for your "very nice"
arhab 4 43 2 Indonesia
5 Apr 2013 7:12AM
hi wimpy, i am afraid this doesn't work for me. your title said motorcycle woman, but i don't see the bike clearly. and the woman face not facing the camera and i think, the eyes should facing the camera to image can work. tetap jepret bro...
paulbroad 8 113 1011 United Kingdom
5 Apr 2013 8:40AM
She was obviously being photographed by someone else on the right and that is so very obvious. You must shout and attract the models attention in these circumstances, getting your shot as they look and pose. She is very close to the right, but if she had been looking at you, that would have been OK.

You are at least a stop under exposed, maybe more. Your flash has not been able to supply enough light and you are well under on ambient. You are using spot metering, so have metered from the wrong area. However, check your LCD after each shot, especially on manual, to b certain things are right.

Paul
5 Apr 2013 8:46AM
dear Arhad,thank you,trima kasih.
dear Paulbroad,noted mssg and clearly understood,best regards
arhab 4 43 2 Indonesia
5 Apr 2013 12:46PM
your other version work better. just follow paul suggestion about lighting and you are on the right track.
paulbroad 8 113 1011 United Kingdom
5 Apr 2013 1:30PM
Your own mod, second image is very much better. It is still just a tiny bit under exposed. To get good separation from the background I would dial in + 1 stop extra flash exposure.

Paul
Nick_w Plus
8 4.2k 99 England
5 Apr 2013 2:28PM
I quite like the pose and expression. I like where theres no eye contact it gives a sense of mood.

It would work better cropping in from the LHS (as you did in the mod). Looking at the shadows, I would guess you are using bare flash. I'm not a great lover of bare flash, particularly on women it gives rather a harsh effect showing up every pore. And the shadows are so distinct and deep. If possible use an umbrella or softbox, alternatively a beauty dish (for this I think that would have worked very well).

Paul is right it is a bit underexposed, however that can be a matter of taste, do you want a good record shot, high key (which wouldn't suit this image) or low key.

Its a shame you recorded in JPEG, as a lot what I will cover below could easily be corrected using RAW - i.e. alter exposure, lift the shadows, and brighten the whites very very easily (and when your happy with one shot, you can copy the settings to all the other images in the series).

What I think it needs a couple of adjustment layers, a curves on for the black dress and , lift it in the centre. Mask out bits you dont want it to affect.

The second ajustment is for the skin, again a curves ajustment, but this time take highlights and lift slightly, and the shadows a very very slight lowering for a gentle s curve. Again mask to taste.

I would remove the red blob on the RHS in the background, and maybe desaturate the background by 5-10% just to make the main subject pop.

HTH

Nick
banehawi Plus
11 1.3k 3402 Canada
5 Apr 2013 6:19PM
Your mod is a much better shot. Its still underexposed, - looks like about a full stop, and Ive uploaded a mod with exposure increased, and colour de saturated a small amount. Ive cropped it to A4 also.

Ive lifted detail in the dress as suggested by Nick.

Spot metering in this case might not have been the best choice, as theres no real strong light differential between the subject and background, so a centre weighted average might have given you more exposure.



regards


Willie
5 Apr 2013 10:05PM
dear Critique TEAM Willie,Nick,Paul,noted the mssg,Thkz
5 Apr 2013 10:09PM
dear Arhad,Trima kasih,sdh menyemangati sya,Salam Jepret.
Thank You to keep me in high spirit,Rgds
7 Apr 2013 2:10AM
dear Paintman and Banehawi Willie,Thkz for up load the modif photo,so i may learn something.
Rgds

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