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Hi George, it's several years since you last clicked the critique button, welcome back!
I wonder what sort of critique you are looking for? (After we have recovered from camera-envy... ) It's a wonderful image that some people will get, some people won't get, and ne'er the twain shall meet.
For me it's a classic example of how the very abstract can mix with the very identifiable, and of the magic lurking in the very ordinary. It's all down to light.
It's a real brain-teaser - all the angles of beams, slats, wires, shadows. The brain gradually sorts out the planes, and what is material, what is illusion. So the challenge for the photographer is to assemble lines in a frame so that they bring a sense of order to chaos, but still keep the mystery
I wanted to try two things, and this is more my self-indulgence than anything else. Lifting highlights just a wee bit gives, I think, a more 3-dimensional feel.
And then framing, composition... I have played with this a wee bit to push the abstract side. A square image, framed by two dark verticals. Square works for abstracts. Landscape and portrait both direct the viewer's eye to move in a certain direction, square leaves it free to bounce round the frame.
It's more formal than your upload, I think it plays on the diagonal. It's my interpretation, because it's the sort of image I can relate to, much more easily than to robins and blue tits. Modification coming up.
Moira
I wonder what sort of critique you are looking for? (After we have recovered from camera-envy... ) It's a wonderful image that some people will get, some people won't get, and ne'er the twain shall meet.
For me it's a classic example of how the very abstract can mix with the very identifiable, and of the magic lurking in the very ordinary. It's all down to light.
It's a real brain-teaser - all the angles of beams, slats, wires, shadows. The brain gradually sorts out the planes, and what is material, what is illusion. So the challenge for the photographer is to assemble lines in a frame so that they bring a sense of order to chaos, but still keep the mystery
I wanted to try two things, and this is more my self-indulgence than anything else. Lifting highlights just a wee bit gives, I think, a more 3-dimensional feel.
And then framing, composition... I have played with this a wee bit to push the abstract side. A square image, framed by two dark verticals. Square works for abstracts. Landscape and portrait both direct the viewer's eye to move in a certain direction, square leaves it free to bounce round the frame.
It's more formal than your upload, I think it plays on the diagonal. It's my interpretation, because it's the sort of image I can relate to, much more easily than to robins and blue tits. Modification coming up.
Moira
I agree entirely with Moira, particularly with regards to the square crop. A very strong graphic just made for B&W.
In the main gallery this would get my award.
Cheers
Alan
In the main gallery this would get my award.
Cheers
Alan
Hello, George, and welcome back to the Critique Gallery.
This is a great subject and I suspect you made the most of it by taking loads of pictures. I love the way the stripes of light are running in different directions across the frame.
I particularly like the one previous to this in your portfolio. With that one, it's possible to put its abstractness into context and understand the sort of place we are in. But not with this one. This is more of an abstract and, as such, I have based my modification on that quality.
Unfortunately, by having such a wide white frame around your it, the image is quite small and modifications are therefore also going to be quite small.
I, too, have chosen a square format. I wanted to make the diagonals stronger, so I rotated the image slightly, taking some into the corners, and then cropped, concentrating on the lines, patterns, light and shadow. I then adjusted contrast and sharpened.
Pamela.
PS: Looking at the two together in the modifications, they look very much alike, apart from my slight rotation. I didn't look at Moira's before doing mine, otherwise I might not have bothered. Great minds.....................as they say.
This is a great subject and I suspect you made the most of it by taking loads of pictures. I love the way the stripes of light are running in different directions across the frame.
I particularly like the one previous to this in your portfolio. With that one, it's possible to put its abstractness into context and understand the sort of place we are in. But not with this one. This is more of an abstract and, as such, I have based my modification on that quality.
Unfortunately, by having such a wide white frame around your it, the image is quite small and modifications are therefore also going to be quite small.
I, too, have chosen a square format. I wanted to make the diagonals stronger, so I rotated the image slightly, taking some into the corners, and then cropped, concentrating on the lines, patterns, light and shadow. I then adjusted contrast and sharpened.
Pamela.
PS: Looking at the two together in the modifications, they look very much alike, apart from my slight rotation. I didn't look at Moira's before doing mine, otherwise I might not have bothered. Great minds.....................as they say.
Take care.
