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On the Arno

By Dannecus
Taken at dusk from the Ponte Vecchio, Florence. The hire boats were coming back from their last trip of the day. There are a stack of bridges over the Arno, the reflections piled up framing the boats nicely. I used the VF-2 for framing, and braced against the bridge wall, but there wasn't much time from spotting the shot to taking it as the boats were moving quite fast and I wanted to get them in the open area between the two reflections. A couple of seconds later the shot was gone.

Olympus E-PL2, 14-150mm. 1/400 F5.6 @150mm, ISO 200. Final tweaks in Lightroom 3.

Tags: River Bridge Reflections Dusk Florence Punt Arno Landscape and travel

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mrswoolybill Plus
15 3.4k 2544 United Kingdom
16 Nov 2013 3:59PM
Hi and welcome to the Critique Gallery - I see that this is your first upload, although you have been on the site for a bit.

I like this, the simplicity and austerity, and the mystery that comes with near-silhouettes. There's just enough detail to give a 3-dimensional feel, but not enough for us to intrude in their private world.

A few points:

First of all, the site isn't picking up your Exif details of camera settings and it really helps if you include that information. It will probably have been stripped from the file when you saved the version for uploading.
You can add it by clicking on the Options button below your picture, then on Edit photo, then at Edit photo information click on the Exif tab. Complete the boxes, then click on Save.

It helps a lot if we can see that, particularly in images like this where light was clearly tricky. From what you have said you did very well, I wish more people would think of how they could brace themselves for added steadiness.

This needs a very slight rotation clockwise, for the reflections to drop straight downwards. (They always fall vertically whatever angle they are viewed from). Because you were not standing square-on, that still won't give a perfectly horizontal water level at the top, but depending on your software that can be achieved using Skew or Perspective correction.

Composition-wise, the boat is not quite central. It would be more pleasing to the eye if it was either placed centrally (for a formal look) or well to one side (for an informal feel). Both could be achieved by cropping.

I shall upload a couple of Modifications in a little while. They will appear under the Modifications button under your upload - click on the thumbnail to view.
Moira
paulbroad Plus
15 131 1294 United Kingdom
16 Nov 2013 4:14PM
Very nice indeed. Adding the info by simply typing it in helps others understand what you have done. They can then learn too. If I were to make a suggestion, it would be to offset the boats to the right. A slightly better balance then.

I really do find your text so much easier to read, Moira. I know you should do just as you please, but it looks so much better and attractive

Paul
mrswoolybill Plus
15 3.4k 2544 United Kingdom
16 Nov 2013 4:15PM
Three Mods uploaded. I found this interesting to work on - I wanted to try to place the boat lower in the frame, but it needs that shadow curve at the bottom otherwise the bridge makes it top-heavy. I think the third of my Mods works best for me.
Dannecus 9 3 United Kingdom
16 Nov 2013 5:36PM
Hi,
Thanks for all the helpful comments and new takes on the photo. I keyed in the EXIF as requested, if you want the full EXIF the photo is also on Flickr, and that version seems to have the full EXIF attached (http://www.flickr.com/photos/dannecus/8020980576/).

I hadn't noticed the rotation (duh!), thanks for that, tempted to upload a fixed version to Flickr now, but may be the slight twist is good to off set what could otherwise be a bit overly symetrical. Most of the comments seem to suggest an offset as a different version, so may be the boat in the centre needs something to counter that symetrical feel.

Since you seemed to have fun with it, I dug out the original file and loaded it as a modification, so you can see where I came from. Cropped top and bottom to clean up the messy bridge traffic and then turned up the natural pink of the sunset a little in Lightroom.

Thanks again for all the helpful comments

Dannecus
mrswoolybill Plus
15 3.4k 2544 United Kingdom
16 Nov 2013 5:41PM
Interesting to see how you've arrived at your upload, I like the warm glow that you have added.

Wouldn't it be nice to have a pillar acting as frame on the left. I might have a go at contriving that...

Thanks for adding the Exif.
Moira
chase Plus
17 2.4k 640 England
16 Nov 2013 6:04PM
Almost symetrical but not quite,I think Moira's addition of the pillar on the left works very well & cradles the boat within a dark frame...my eye is then pulled right to them.
I like the warm colours & the good reflections.
A crop from the bottom would be my suggestion,you still retain the dark outline & the boats come much further forward into view. Just pop a piece of paper over the bottom bit & see how different it looks. The format would then be almost letterbox.

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