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Pannee

By illuzioo
She is Pannee, my new model from the next city. She is very young, but very-very beautiful!
This is her first photoshoot, but not the last! XD

C&C welcome!

Tags: Fashion Portraits and people Flash and lighting Beauty young Nude and glamour

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This photo is here for critique. Please only comment constructively and with suggestions on how to improve it.

Comments


kaybee 12 4.7k 25 Scotland
2 Sep 2008 10:40AM
Nice idea but for me it doesn't quite hit the mark.

The face isn't quite sharp enough - that may be from the compression for uploading (you could try sharpening it slightly after compression) but I am not sure.

Also the wee triangle of skin on the left needs cropped as it tends to draw the eye over there.

The models right shoulder is raised a bit too much and it makes it look like her arm comes out of her ear.

It sounds like I am just pulling this shot apart but when you have asked for critique I have to tell it as I see it. However, if this was her first shoot then both of you will be a bit nervous and your next shoot will produce much more relaxed shots

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2 Sep 2008 12:15PM
Kaybee:

Really thanks the comment. I watch the photo again and again and I agree with you. The shoulder not at the right height. I will sharpen the following images for the quality. Thanks again.

Géza
tim g 12 13 United Kingdom
2 Sep 2008 4:16PM
Works for me , lovely professional image.

Tim
semas 9 United Kingdom
3 Sep 2008 7:16AM
Apart from the comments above, something that also caught my eye was the lovely models eyeshadow. I think she is pretty enough without the distracting green/shimmering around her eyes.
Apart from that, nice shot.
paulbroad 8 113 1012 United Kingdom
3 Sep 2008 8:52PM
At first sight a fine shot of a lovely girl - but then I see things. Your focal point is obvious, and not the eyes - and the hand on the right becomes very prominent. Despite her obvious beauty and atributes, I would still concentrate on those rather nice eyes.

I would crop much tighter to just below the bust and some off left and right.

paul
banehawi Plus
11 1.3k 3402 Canada
3 Sep 2008 11:52PM
I have uploaded a mod with these suggestions, - including everything said by the above, with:

An alternate crop. showing how it would look if you had left more room at the top in the original (I didnt try to fill in a fake hair!). What this does is focus on the eyes and face, - the eyes are on a "thirds" intersection.

Its a suggestion, and hope it helps


Regards


Willie
Hoffy Plus
11 262 16 England
4 Sep 2008 10:16PM
Nice looking model, you are goig to have some nice shoots with her, this is a give effort but have to agree with Kaybee that the face is not strong enough, the breast is the dominate part of the image.
xGei8ht 7 61 United Kingdom
13 Dec 2011 6:49PM
The photo is fine imo.

I think the trouble lies in the models eyebrows and hairline.

Brows are too straight and hairline cuts of the rest of the face and makeup under eyes should have been same colour as skirt.

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