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Peek a boo!

By tom_earwaker
I'm not too sure about this one. I quite like the colours and the position of the leaf but the composition feels a bit too 'busy' and I struggled to find a crop that I was happy with. I've also uploaded the original without any crop in case you're interested.
Thanks for looking!

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mrswoolybill Plus
15 3.1k 2475 United Kingdom
29 Jun 2017 8:39AM

Quote: I've also uploaded the original without any crop in case you're interested.

I'm not seeing a version so I assume that what we are seeing is the original?
Was the lady conscious of doing this or was it just a chance movement, I wonder? It's a one-off, a moment in time. And such shots tend to have all the annoying imperfections and compromises of real life.

The first problem that I saw, and I suspect that this is what you are seeing, is that the foreground lady is leading us to look to our left, whereas the lady in the background is dragging our gaze rightward. I have uploaded a much tighter crop, keeping your portrait format, so keeping some of her merchandise as a frame at the bottom.

But now I am wondering if the tension between the two ladies would actually work without the foreground drawing our eyes downwards. I'm off to try.

If you are interested (and I may have mentioned this to you before) a wonderful book by Michael Freeman called The Photographer's Eye explores precisely this sort of area, the way the eye travels around an image, bouncing from one area to another before coming to rest - and the things that can interrupt that flow.

Anyway, another mod to follow in a few minutes.
mrswoolybill Plus
15 3.1k 2475 United Kingdom
29 Jun 2017 9:08AM
So that's two totally different crops uploaded, both are about simplifying the 'busyness'. I'll be interested in your thoughts.
dudler Plus
18 1.8k 1892 England
29 Jun 2017 10:37AM
I was going ot play with cropping, but Moira's two crops are everything I could have hoped to achieve.

A different view appeals here - I find that keeping an 85mm lens on all the time isn't the disadvantage people assume it is: and translated into Olympus, that's the lovely, cheapest lens in the range 45mm f/1.8. Just a thought... And the long end of the zoom woudl give similar results.
paulbroad Plus
14 131 1293 United Kingdom
29 Jun 2017 6:05PM
The idea is good, but it's a bit too much of a peek for me. I would like to see most or all of that eye peeping round the leaf. Given that, a rather tighter crop removing the other figure would concentrate the eye.

29 Jun 2017 6:07PM
I like both crops, its quite interesting how the eye moves about in different ways. The woman in the background definately draws my eye out to the right, and the woman on the left holds my eye a bit more but pulls it slightly left onto her shoulder. In the crop with both of them, that tension works better than in my crop as I find that I flick between the two of them without getting drawn to the foreground.
By the way, I forgot to upload the uncropped image, it's there now!
I would like that 45mm lens, it looks very nice...
mrswoolybill Plus
15 3.1k 2475 United Kingdom
29 Jun 2017 9:52PM
Every image tells a story, they say... I rather like your original. I wish there were a few more pixels at the top for the eyes, but I've had a bit of fun. There's the balance of two partly concealed faces.

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