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By Bungabelandajr
iso : 100
lens kit 18-70mm
speed : 1/125
f: f/56

Tags: Still life Black and white Close-up and macro

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15 Oct 2010 6:50AM
Good shot, works well in B & W. I keep wanting to move the camera dead center though. Well done, David

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DRicherby 7 269 725 United Kingdom
15 Oct 2010 5:32PM
Excellent shot and a good black and white conversion. I think I'd prefer the camera dead-centre to really exploit the symmetry of the hoops (maybe it's something about being called David Smile ) — you can count the bricks to work out where the exact centre is, if you want to go that way. I'd also prefer to see the front hoop and the bricks on the ground in sharp focus. Using a narrower aperture (higher f-number) and focusing a little closer should get that quite easily. You'll certainly have enough depth of field at f/11 and probably at f/8, too. You can always go to ISO-200 to keep the shutter speed down; you probably won't notice any change in image quality from the slightly higher ISO.
8 1.6k 574 United Kingdom
17 Oct 2010 6:37PM
i like the use of the rolled tubes as a pattern to show the recessesion down the centre but i find the mix of pattern and natural elements is in conflict. im unsure if its enough to simply take the eye down the centre without a stopper or focal point at the end.

if you take the top left side, you have the light coming thro the trees and this is rather distracting, id suggest making the image more arty by selecting and turning this dappled areas in plain solid black blocks to act as a foil to the polish on the bent tubes.

the area of bricks at the front base is well out of focus and this should have been rendered sharp by increasing the depth of field and choosing the area on which to focus with more deliberation. other wise you need to be enphasising shallow depth of field and making the area of sharpness very shallow and in a specificaly chosen zone. as stated above, get down to f11 to f16, up the iso or use a tripod and choose where you want to focus instead of allowing the auto focus to choose.

8 1.6k 574 United Kingdom
17 Oct 2010 6:53PM
i meant to mention by the way, that the choice to go mono was a good one and the conversion was handled well
monstersnowman 11 1.7k 1 England
20 Oct 2010 5:49PM
Having not read the other comments my critique would be .. the converging lines of the centre of the curved bars would look great in the centre in my opinion ... so to achieve this a lower perspective and a slight move to the right. Then making sure the distance from the top and the sides of the bars to the image edge is exactly the same all round to reinforce the uniformity .. I think this slight adjustment in viewpoint would tie in all the lines that would lead you to the image centre and strengthen the image slightly. Hope this is helpful critique. P.S. the mono is good .. is focuses your view on the pattern rather having an added distraction of colour.
@Monstersnowman : thanks you for you comment and advice...


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