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Portrait 1

By jamiemilliken
comments and thought would be greatly appreciated

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grahamf 8 8 South Africa
15 Jan 2009 1:58PM
Wonderful portrait of father and son. Well done.

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15 Jan 2009 2:03PM
Terrific lighting and a super pose, welcome to EPZ Smile
Alex
DannyLenihan 8 213 19 England
15 Jan 2009 4:44PM
It's a wonderful concept, even if the execution needs a little seeing to.

The good bits: I love the composition and the skin tones. The image speaks of protection, raw grittiness, tenderness and love.

The bits I think need work:

1: The crop is a little too tight. You clipped the elbow which I find quite distracting, and the top of the frame encroaches on the guy's head. I also think you've lost a lot by cropping out the baby's bum, and the guys arm cradling it.
2: The nappy and part of the baby's forearm are precariously close to being hotspots. The nappy is already blown out because of it's colour, and really needs some texture in it. I find my eyes drawn to the bright white, instead of to the man's eyes, which are, in my humble opinion, the focal point of this shot.
3: If the guy had just lowered the baby a touch, or if you'd got higher above them, you wouldn't have that left ear encroaching on the guy's face - almost into his right eye.

These are all very very minor details, but they make the difference between a good shot, and a great one.

Welcome to EPZ. A great start to your PF.

Danny
Thank you all so much for your feedback, really enjoying being part of EZ and already reaping the benefits. Thank you for your thoroughness Dannyjames you have some excellent points there. more pics to come soon!
SPOTON 8 South Africa
15 Jan 2009 7:35PM
This is a beautiful portrait - has a wonderful feel to it, well done! Love, Mandi
Anjantoo 8 7 1 England
15 Jan 2009 9:40PM
I must admit I never seem to really notice problems until someone else points them out (usually on my work!).
This is a beautiful portrait, and a lovely tattoo too!
Jann
xxx
banehawi Plus
12 1.5k 3556 Canada
16 Jan 2009 12:25AM
It is a nice concept, - I think it would be a lot stronger if the adult had been looking into the camera. Im drawn to his eyes, and find Im wondering what hes looking at.

I agree with the bulk of whats been stated above, - and I have loaded a severely cropped mod that might be an idea worth pursuing.



Regards


Willie
Hey Banehawi

Thank you very much for the mod and the advice very much appreciated indeed

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