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banehawi Plus
15 2.2k 4095 Canada
27 Mar 2018 1:37PM
A very pretty model.

The focus and sharpness are quite good, as is the focus on her eyes.

Her face is underexposed quite a bit; you may have better results using partial metering on the Canon rather than spot, as spot can tend to underexpose.

The greenery is contributing to slightly colouring the light on her face, so a green correction can be helpful.

Mostly though I would suggest a tighter crop, especially to remove the empty space above her head. Though I can see the point in framing her face with the branches, the ones above are too far above her head.



Ive applied these suggestions in the mod.


Regards



Willie

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Thanks willie Iíve just started getting into portrait photography Iíve never really tried it before this was from my first shoot with a model in the park
mrswoolybill Plus
13 1.9k 2167 United Kingdom
27 Mar 2018 1:43PM
Hi Andrew, I wonder if this was an organized group shoot, and a venture into new territory for you? I don't see anything similar in your pf here.

John (dudler) is your man, I have just a few thoughts. I really like the framing idea, it's unusual and beautiful. I would like the face to be a little bit higher in that frame. It does rather look as though your model is straining to peer over the pine needles! Maybe she needed a box to stand on?

Various reasons for putting her a bit higher: It would avoid the empty space above her head (the framing above is excellent), it would place the eyes higher in the frame, they are about half way down from the top here but if they are nearer to 1/3 down that places them on an easier eye-level for the viewer's gaze. Plus we are looking up at the chin line and nostrils, and that is not flattering for a woman's face.

Cosmetic details - there has been quite a bit of skin-smoothing applied I think, at the cost of a sense of skin texture. Or possibly just very heavy foundation... It's a matter of taste, but it doesn't work for me. Also, shimmer lipstick really is very difficult to photograph... That may have been outside your control though.

I hope we'll see more from this shoot, and it would help if you let us know more about the circumstances.
Moira

Edit - Willie was working at the same time as I was typing, I like his mod. But it does lose the top part of the foliage frame, which is a pity. I might try to move that down.
Hi moira thanks for your comments much appreciated,
no this was not an organised group shoot I just wanted to experiment in portrait photography as Iíve never really tried it so I got the model and headed to the local park this was 1 of 20 images I took.
dudler Plus
16 1.1k 1600 England
27 Mar 2018 6:31PM
Only 20 pictures?

I've been in a park today with a male model, and we have 134 images... Lots fail, but we were experimenting a lot. Shoot variations of everything!

Spot metering from skin tones is something I used to do with film - for Caucasian skin, I added a stop of exposure to the reading. For this model, I'd add slightly less. Ideally, though, you'd use a separate meter and take an incident light reading... With digital, I check the first picture, and use the histogram to check in detail if I'm in any doubt about the right exposure.

You chose a really good model, which is half the job, especially with a first shoot: if you have to help the model learn her job while you experiment with yours, you have a problem!

I like the fringe of evergreen you used to frame at the top, so I might crop a fraction at the bottom - putting the face dead centre is a high-rish strategy.

An excellent start!
dark_lord Plus
16 2.5k 634 England
27 Mar 2018 9:28PM
A good start Andrew.

I too would like to see her face higher in the frame, though I did notice the framing so I guess you gave it some thought. Placement of the subject in your second imag is much more pleasing. i'm all for trying different compositions and crops, some will work well, others less so.

Hpwever, one of my other 'first thoughts' was that the eyes are dead centre becase you used the centre focusing point.
Whether you did ir not, for portraits you could choose which focusing point the camera uses. A focus point where you want the eyes to appear would be great and avoid you constantly adjusting the camera between focus and taking the image. You may not want to do that in all situiations but it's useful to know how to set that, and with the minimum of fuss.

Spot metering is frought with danger unless you really understand exposure and how metering works. As you were in a park on a day with soft even lighting, use Evaluative metering, it'll be fine. If in doubt, take a reading from the grass and use those settings, as grass is a perfect mid-tone.
28 Mar 2018 7:15AM
Brilliant and amazing portrait!!!

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