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Rainshower

By jentri
I am looking to learn about composition and art in photography. While I love clear, masterful images, I am only beginning to develop my skills and don't yet have the camera necessary to achieve that. I have taken many photos that I have personally liked or considered good, but I am not sure where to begin in learning to improve on my style without some outsider input. I also love editing pictures to where they look almost unreal. I would like feedback on this image only for what it is, I was experiencing an especially long commute today because of the rain and I really liked the look of the water droplets on the windshield so I took out my iPhone and snapped this shot. I'm not sure what to think of it, but I guess it is as good of a shot as any to start learning from.

Tags: Sky Rain Busy City Dark Lights Water Traffic People Close-up and macro Drops

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mrswoolybill Plus
15 3.2k 2527 United Kingdom
31 Jan 2014 8:41AM
Hi, welcome to the site and to the Critique Gallery, I see that you have joined today! I hope that you enjoy it here, it's a good place to learn and to share.

I like what you have done, it's a 'capture the moment' shot. All about atmosphere. Rain and street lighting produce those wonderfully intense splashes of colour against moody blue/greys. The angles of the buildings give an oppressive feel, we are very small in a big, cold city. Portrait (vertical) format works so well here.

It's a subject that requires a certain amount of precision, harder with a phone than a camera - you have managed this very well! The important thing is that the focus needs to be on the water droplets not on the more distant view - ideally I would like to see the focus on those lower droplets and a bit more depth of field but that's personal taste and difficult to manage effectively. What you have got here works.

The figure with the umbrella is particularly good, that adds life and movement.

I would make just one change, a slight crop, to get rid of the bit of building peeping in on the right. There's not enough of it to add to the composition, the lines would be cleaner without it. I'll up load a Modification in a few minutes, it will appear under the Modifications button below your upload, click on the thumbnail to view.

Generally we ask posters to include Exif data - camera settings - as this information is useful for critique purposes. I don't know if you will be able to access that information though.

I hope we see more of your pictures here!
Moira
mrswoolybill Plus
15 3.2k 2527 United Kingdom
31 Jan 2014 8:54AM
Modification uploaded, just a crop. I missed a few words out of my comment above -
The important thing is that the focus needs to be on the water droplets not on the more distant view - and you have achieved that very nicely!
pamelajean Plus
16 1.7k 2257 United Kingdom
31 Jan 2014 4:28PM
Hello, Jenifer, and welcome to EPZ.
It's refreshing to see something a bit different, which you have captured well.
It would be less strong without the brightly coloured lights.

I'd like to have seen more of the drops in focus, especially at the bottom, but still quite like the effect you have captured. I wonder if the fall-off in focus is due to your camera phone not being held parallel to the glass.

An alternative would, of course, be to get closer and have larger drops in your frame, perhaps picking out an area like the bit at the bottom where the colours make all the difference....each drop takes on the colour that is behind it. But I'm not sure how close you can get with your iPhone without losing detail.

It reminds me of images taken through a shower screen, intriguing because of what you can "barely" seeGrin!
But raindrops on windows is also a popular subject, and your image reminds me of why I like them.
Firstly, the droplets make fascinating patterns on glass, and sometimes start to run down the glass making vertical lines.
Secondly, if you look closely at the droplets, you will see that they each show an upside-down image of the scene that lies behind the glass. This is one good reason for getting in closer for a bit more detail in the drops, each with little scenes inside them.

You have managed to capture the rain whilst it is in neat circles, almost perfectly round. That neatness will vary according to the intensity of the rain.

It's difficult to advise on settings because none are shown, but it's important to get the drops sharp and the background blurred, which you have managed well. In most cases, a wide aperture is ideal because it blurs the background nicely.

Pamela.

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