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Ride my bike

By pptbudi
Bandung Lautan Photographer 2017 Event

Tags: Women Portraits and people

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paulbroad Plus
12 131 1285 United Kingdom
17 Dec 2017 4:40PM
There is a good image in there, but what is she doing? You really do need eye contact here as she just seems to be doing hr hair? Wait for the moment.

Paul

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pamelajean Plus
13 1.2k 2094 United Kingdom
17 Dec 2017 4:52PM
You don't give us any information about the image, Budy, what kind of event it was, if the young lady was a model, etc.

Anyway, she has a relaxed attitude on the bike.
I am wondering if this is a crop from a larger image because there are a few things on the frame edges that have been clipped (the mirrors, the registration, the lamp and her leg), which might not be clipped on the original.

I feel that her leg looks awkward. I have done a modification where I cropped to remove some of the part-intrusions. I filled the background so that it excluded the people and the bright areas, all of which are distractions. I then did a slight Levels adjustment.

I suppose a lot depends on whether the bike or the girl are your important features....or both.

Pamela.
pamelajean Plus
13 1.2k 2094 United Kingdom
17 Dec 2017 5:01PM
Sorry, I mis-spelt your name, Budi.
banehawi Plus
15 2.1k 4036 Canada
17 Dec 2017 5:19PM
Better with eye contact as suggested. Underexposed a bit, and maybe the weather wasnt great.

I uploaded a mod similar to what Pamelajean has done. Increased exposure, decreased contrast, increased saturation, cropped to add a bit at the top.

Im sure you had lots of other opportunities!


Regards


Willie
RLF Plus
9 18 4 United Kingdom
17 Dec 2017 5:57PM
I love it for what it is! An unusual portrait Tongue
She is quite preoccupied and seems unconcerned with the exciting machinery about her.
I prefer the version 1Smile
Rob
mrswoolybill Plus
12 1.6k 2081 United Kingdom
17 Dec 2017 6:00PM
I like the pose and the direction of gaze, it's teasing - it implies that there's something far more interesting than us.

But it needs Pamela's crop, to get rid of the bit of number plate at the bottom (I hate it when I cannot read something in full), and the stray bit of leg on the right which looks really awkward.
Moira
dudler Plus
16 951 1521 England
17 Dec 2017 6:16PM
You have two subjects here, and you need a tight and thoughtful composition to make the most of them.

Crucial points are the name on the side of the fuel tank, and the girl's tattoos.

You may have needed the wide aperture to throw the background out of focus - was that intentional? I'd have tended to go with a longer focla length, if it was available: 35mm on that body is a standard lens. A short telephoto will allow you to concentrate more on the subject.

I am wondering if a slight variation of viewpoint would have been better - or whether you chose as you did to allow the face and fuel tank to both be sharp. Please tell me!
pablophotographer 8 1.3k 352
18 Dec 2017 5:34PM
Budi, long time no see Smile I am glad you are well and you keep taking pictures.
This is unusual but not surprising. You seem to want to be doing pictures that others might had not taken, this is not bad, you are just developing your own style.
Royal Enfield is a well known brand, but nowadays everyone wants to become a brand of their own. So I thought if I am to crop let's focus on just the girl. The mysterious girl. No-one knows how she got on the bike or the bike if the bike is hers. Who cares? She doesn't and that carelessness is what I see being recorded here. Actually I could call this ''Young and careless'' The white bright space that I quite often mention to people to be wary of here is working very well with her face and the white in the blouse diagonally.
Worry not. Stay careless, it keeps you feeling young.
pablophotographer

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