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RIver Avon at Marcliff

By nicktg      
OK, What am I doing wrong? Posted this one a few days ago and it got 1 vote an no comments. SO I've take the other one off and posting it here for critique along with a version or 2 of my own ( I bought the Kelby lightroom 3 book so I'm playingGrin).

Feel free to rip it to pieces as I'm confused ( the one I put on yesterday seems to be liked and I think it's crap compared to this (it's a different subject matter but I can see at least 4 faults with itGrin)

THis photography will send me grey ... ah, too late for the... make that greyer

Nick

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pamelajean Plus
10 958 1818 United Kingdom
29 Jul 2011 7:20PM
Hello, Nick. Please don't make yourself any greyer.
The picture is of a river and trees with a bit of sky. It's quite pleasant with good colour and contrasts. I think the major problem is that there is nothing in particular to focus the viewer's attention upon. I can see a little boat moored by the reeds on the right bank, beneath the right dark circle. I can see a swan emerging from the dark area back left and moving across to the right. I can see a fisherman sitting on the right of the foreground bank, casting into the left of the picture. I can see one or two people sitting to the left on the foreground grass and gazing into the water. But none of these things are actually there. It would take a manipulation to put them there, but I might be tempted to do this because it's a very nice scene and is crying out for a focal point. A picture like this can also work well if the reflections are good, but I think that the overall green colour lets the reflections down because they are just adding more green and have turned all of the water green. If the water had been reflecting an attractive cloudy blue sky, it would bring in a different colour. You may have fet that the foreground flowers helped with a focal point but they are not large enough to be of benefit. If you had got in lower and closer to the flowers, finding just a few and getting them in good focus, this could have worked. I hope this has been of some help.
Pamela.

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rambler Plus
7 608 14 England
29 Jul 2011 7:43PM
Hi Nick,
from one greying snapper to another let me say this is a good shot.
However the sky does nothing to enhance it, crop it out. The trouble with taking pictures of 'empty' scenes is that the eye cannot settle one one point of interest. This makes it a little uncomfortable to view simply because our brains are programmed to find something. Have a go at putting something in under the trees, even if is only a white dot, and see the difference it makes.

The Mono version is much stronger thanks to the crop and the lighting adjustment.

oh and don't take too much notice of the judging, if you asked everyone who voted for your pics why they did so they would all give a different reason.

Ken.
Jestertheclown 7 7.3k 249 England
29 Jul 2011 10:22PM
From another platinum silver photographer;
I've uploaded a mod. in which I've made some adjustments using (just) the colour balance tool as I think the original is far too green.
I didn't do anything with the sky. If this was an image I wanted to keep, I'd simply replace it.
Hope this helps.

Bren.
nicktg Plus
8 24 1 United Kingdom
30 Jul 2011 8:27AM
Thanks guys

I thought I was going doolally ( should use that word more I feel Grin)

@pamela,

As I've said many a time, I'm not one for a lot of processing so this has taken a lot of courage to do what I've done so far lol! I'll see if I can find a boat and 'shop' it in Grin

@Bren,

I like the mod and OK about the sky ... hmm this sounds like fun - I'll have to look in the book Grin

ANd finally @Ken,

wise advice Grin I also like the B&W conversion ... I used to shoot a lot of Black and White in my younger days, maybe I should go back to my roots as it were.


RIght off to do the shopping and then out with the camera I think

Nick the slightly grey Smile
NEWMANP Plus
8 1.6k 574 United Kingdom
30 Jul 2011 10:22AM
hello,
firstly the clicking side, dont worry, people including me, click on shots that stand out for some reason, and to be fair, no matter how evocative of a lovely day you had, nor how competent the image is in the taking, there is little mood or subject matter to lift the thumb out from all the hundreds that get uploaded each day. put a sunset on and you will get more , trust me on that.

as an image, its hard to see what else you could get from the scene apart from a bit of considered framing to eliminate a distracting bit of sky.

there is mnothing wrong with the image but its pretty ordinary without a focal point and a lack of exciting light.

hope that helps without being too unkind which i dont wish be.
pHIL
nicktg Plus
8 24 1 United Kingdom
30 Jul 2011 2:09PM
Frank/Phil,

Thanks once again for the honest critique. I guess I thought the River itself would lead the eye in and around the bend but shows what I know Grin. Of out now to see if I can find inspiration nearer to home ... and get some shots of Dragonflies while I'm at it Grin

THanks again

Nick

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