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Sam

By Alexanderdiplock  
My good friend Sam. Using my Nissin flash off camera.

Tags: Black and white Portraits and people

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miptog 16 3.6k 65 United Kingdom
27 Jun 2009 6:54PM
Like the composition, and the B&W works well. My only comment is that the flash seems a bit harsh. Perhaps you could try and soften it next time.

Mike
IMAGESTAR 15 7 United Kingdom
27 Jun 2009 8:33PM
good detail & d.o.f
Brian
malc_c 15 2 167 England
28 Jun 2009 6:16AM
Hi Alex,

You've done a pretty good job here- good engagement with your model, who's personality seems to shine through the image. Your point of focus is spot on and the DOF pretty effective too.

For me the weakest area is the overall composition, which leaves Sam's face too small and crowded in the top of the frame. With so much more available space this emphasises her head being chopped off. I'm sure the composition must be as you intended, but I don't think inclusion of her bust adds anything to this particular portrait.

The second weakness is the highlights reflected off the cheek and forehead in particular. It is imperative to avoid these in this sort of portrait where you want to reproduce the skin tones

To illustrate these I have done a mod, well actually two as the second is basically an improvement on the first, which-

- crops the bottom and left of the image to frame the face
- darkens Sam's top which is still distractingly bright (better in the second mod)
- cloned her skin, gaussian blurred it at 1.3pix, used a levels adjustment to lighten this (because multiply is a darkening filter, see below) and limit the maximum brightness to 224, then mixed that back with the original using multiply blending mode with an opacity of 92%. This controls the highlights and smooths out skin blemishes- again better in the second mod.
- applied minor sharpening to the eyes and lips to make them pop out of the image more

Hope you like the result and find these comments useful

malcolm
Thankyou for you time Malcolm.
I must admit i do like the crop & the sharpening of details in the modifications, however i do think she looks a little ill in the the third.

Quote:- cloned her skin, gaussian blurred it at 1.3pix, used a levels adjustment to lighten this (because multiply is a darkening filter, see below) and limit the maximum brightness to 224, then mixed that back with the original using multiply blending mode with an opacity of 92%. This controls the highlights and smooths out skin blemishes

I have no idea what this means...

Note all your critique will be noted and taken on board,
thanks again,
Alex

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