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Sandra

By MyOwnWonderland  
my bnw portriet Smile


this is my sister Aleksandra

Tags: Portraits and people

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kel55 4 8 United Kingdom
27 Oct 2013 8:12PM
A very beautiful , and engaging portrait .

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banehawi Plus
12 1.4k 3492 Canada
27 Oct 2013 9:18PM
She is beautiful, and the portrait is good overall.

Looking at composition, I think her arm is taking up too much of the frame space, so I would crop tighter; as a mono treatment, the contrast is quite low, and you are really working in a restricted tonal range, excluding blacks and whites, so I would pull in the ends of the histogram to increase contrast, and give a more dynamic appearance. If you wanted a softer look, perhaps adding some diffuse glow can get you there too, as in mod2?


regards


Willie
dudler Plus
13 434 833 England
27 Oct 2013 9:25PM
The thing that really strikes me is that the hair is sharper than the eye.

So easy for this to happen: you need to select which of hte AF points you use, and make sure that it is over hte eye.

Alternatively, just use the central spot (switch all the others off, for ever!), focus, and then recompose before pressing the shutter release fully. STrictly, this ought to give a slight error - in practice, it doesn't usually do so.
ErictheViking 3 124 102 Scotland
27 Oct 2013 9:33PM
I agree with Willie however while pulling the dark end into the histogram strengthens the darks and for me gives more framing to the face I find the highlight marker when pulled into the histogram imo the highlights are too high and loose detail.
In my MOD I've adjusted to give a softer image with darker shadows but keeping the toned down highlights.

Erik
ErictheViking 3 124 102 Scotland
27 Oct 2013 9:45PM
As a second MOD I have concentrated on making the detail of the eye more noticeable everything else is the same as MOD 1
mrswoolybill Plus
9 948 1479 United Kingdom
28 Oct 2013 2:52PM
Very interesting to read various reactions to this. The arm doesn't bother me, I rather like the strong diagonal frame. I find it's the expanse of neck at the bottom of the frame that creates the imbalance. I would prefer a crop there, to give a more taut feel. If everything below the chin is cropped off there's a rather pleasing (to my eye) V-shape to the composition.
I love that solemn, level, calm, direct gaze. I wish the eye was sharper and the hair above it softer - dudler's observation is spot on.
A little more brightness and contrast needed, the skin looks slightly muddy. If you open this in Levels and look at the histogram, the curve of the graph rises and falls some distance from either end of the baseline - that means that there is very little tonal range, no really light or dark tones, so the result looks flat. B&W needs that wider range. Mod to follow...
Moira

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