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Second Shot :D

By IshanPathak  
Heres another shot which i took, " trying ' to keep in mind of all those critiques on the previous picture Smile

I know i didnt provide much space in the front but i had to cope up with the situation

Tags: Black and white Portraits and people

Comments


Coast 11 1.6k 292 United Kingdom
9 May 2014 10:30AM
Morning Ishan

Two pleasant portraits here. V2 for me needs a tighter crop with a little space left to the right side for your subject to look across into.

V1 is an extreme rotation and doesn't work for me. It looks like he is about to fall and drop out of the picture Grin When going for these extreme angles, think about the finished image and does it make a statement or improve the shot?

You have done some selective blurring of the background and it is not a bad job you have made but does need some attention to detail to tidy up. Zoom into the image and inspect your adjustments to ensure they are tidy and clean edged.

Ive uploaded a mod with the rotation sorted to a more standard perspective. I've lightened the eyes a little to bring out some detail and sparkle. Otherwise for a candid portrait you have a nice image here and the mono conversion has been well handled too.

Regards
Paul

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mrswoolybill Plus
13 1.7k 2114 United Kingdom
9 May 2014 11:50AM
I like the way you are experimenting with angles. V2 works much better for me, because in V2 your subject is leaning against the tilt of the lens, in V1 he is leaning with it - that's why he looks as though he is about to slide out of the screen there.

In V2 the body tilts leftwards as the background tilts right - and then he turns his head to follow the angle of the tilt. I like that a lot.

A bit of dodging on the face and a tighter crop needed - it's crying out for a square crop. Modification to follow.
Moira
9 May 2014 11:51AM
good day Ishan

good advice above but I love quirky angles have fun with your hobby

Graham
Joline Plus
13 30 54 United States
9 May 2014 12:06PM
I like v2 a lot. As stated above v1 looks like he is falling out of the frame, although I don't mind the angled horizon per se. It gives it a modern twist. V2 could use some lightening of his face to bring out his features. He is an excellent model, very photogenic.
IshanPathak 5 202 12 India
9 May 2014 2:22PM
Thank You everyone Grin

joline: You made his day Grin Grin
Your mod is very good Smile. Thanku so much

Paul: Your mod is excellent as always, but isnt the eyes in your mod too unnatural? I mean its a bit pale, and it gives him an odd look. In that previous picture the lightening up of the eyes worked splendidly but i really am not sure about this one. Else everything is perfect Smile

digital_boi: Thank You for your mod, it looks very good.

mrswoolybill: I personally love your mod! you really made V2 stand out Smile Smile
Tons of thanks Smile Smile

Ishan
banehawi Plus
15 2.2k 4066 Canada
9 May 2014 2:47PM
V2 is the better of the two, as V1 is just too far tilted, and V2 looks more of a candid.

Dont go wild with blurring, you can end up making it look obvious, so use smaller, less strong brushes as you get near edges that should be sharp, like his arm. Zoom in to see better the effect you apply, and where its affecting.


Regards


Willie
pamelajean Plus
13 1.3k 2098 United Kingdom
9 May 2014 4:48PM
Hello, Ishan, I've nothing to add to the above, but would just like to say something about your extreme angles.

It worked well on the last one because the young man was "animated", he was excited about something and it was a fun image in the first place, so the jaunty angle really suited his emotion and body language.

With these today, they are more like "portraits" or even candids of your friend, and he knows you are taking his picture, so is posing for you. The first one doesn't work for me because the angle doesn't suit the pose.
I hope that makes sense to you.

Pamela.
paulbroad Plus
12 131 1287 United Kingdom
10 May 2014 9:43AM
V1 suffers from the camera tilt. You really should not do this if there is background showing that is also, thus, going to tilt. It just looks so very wrong. The other problem, on both, is the lighting. You subject is too dark and the background too light. You need a flash fill or change in position. The figures are far too dark.

Paul

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