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shaking off the water

By Allistairg1964
Tried to capture the swan taking off please offer any help you deem fit

thanks you

Tags: Wildlife and nature

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pamelajean Plus
14 1.4k 2161 United Kingdom
16 Sep 2020 2:50PM
Hello, Allistair, and welcome to EPZ's Critique Gallery. I see that this is your first upload here.

You arrived here because you checked the "Critique Wanted" option.
This is where we do our best to provide constructive feedback, and along the way, help you improve.
We can also upload modifications of your original shot to show what we mean.

The more information you give us regarding your photographic aims and intentions, the better. It's also useful to a critiquer if they can see your complete Exif Data (camera settings). You can easily add them manually by clicking on the Options button below your picture, then on Edit Photo, then at Edit Photo Information click on the Exif tab. Complete the boxes, then click on Save.
I’m sure you know where to find that information – but for reference, open the picture on your hard drive, right click on it, click on Properties, and then Details.

For instance, I don't think your shutter speed was fast enough to capture a sharper shot of the swan as it was shaking off the water. It's a well-timed capture and the swan's stance is a nice one, but the sharpness isn't there.

Also, the time of day that you shot this is important. Being white, it is all too easy to burn out some of a swan's feathers, which you have done on the top of one of its wings. So shooting early morning or late afternoon, when the light is more diffused, is a good idea, never in full sunlight.

Your image would benefit from straightening. The water's edge is sloping down to the right. Alternatively, you could crop that part above the water because it just acts as a distraction. Even then, I think that straightening would level up the water better.

You have a good reflection of the swan in the water, and you have nicely placed the swan on the right of the frame, with space in front of it, to move into.

I offer a simple modification showing straightening and a crop, slightly repositioning the swan and removing the part at the top of the frame. Just a compositional suggestion.

I hope these comments are of some help, but some extra shot details would be helpful.

Pamela.
chase Plus
15 1.8k 457 England
16 Sep 2020 3:20PM
Hi Alistair and welcome.
We really could do with the information Pamela has mentioned above, without it, we are batting in the dark.
As I see this, the image is very noisy, which can be caused by using a very high ISO value and cropping the image, therefore the exif data is very important.
You have captured the Swan in a good pose and included some of the reflections too which is good, the frame does need straightening, which Pamela has demonstrated very well in her modification.
I don't think this is focused as well as it could be but all the noise is very distracting and therefore detail is difficult to see.
Just over exposed on the wing too, so without more info from you we can't offer constructive critique as far as your camera settings go.

We do need your input and perhaps the original image too as a reference point. You can add the original as a modification, click on the blue modifications button below you image where you will see Pamelas mod, you can then add the original by clicking on the upload modification button.
dark_lord Plus
16 2.7k 700 England
16 Sep 2020 5:23PM
Welcome from me too.

That's a decent camera and lens combination so it would be useful to know the full exif and see the complete frame, as it looks to be shot at high ISO and is a significant crop.
Water doesn't slope so that should have been the first thing to correct.

The swan lookls like it's just flexing its wings so if you want to try capturing the takeoff you need to follow the action and ideally use Continuous AF. Not every run will result in flight, sometimes they just scoot along the water so there'll be a lot of 'almost' shots.
dudler Plus
17 1.3k 1717 England
17 Sep 2020 1:49PM
And welcome form me, as well, Alastair.

There's plenty of good advice above: I'll add that the exposure is a bit challenging, and my feeling is that you've burned out the swan in getting detail in dark areas that you don't really need. However, only the full EXIF will really tell the tale.

I know - having dabbled and failed utterly - that wildlife is very hard work. You need the right kit, but you also need good light, a real understanding of your subjects and their behaviour, and a dollop of luck. Plus thousands and thousands of frames of practice.

Please forgive me if you have an extensive portfolio of images and loads of experience - it's hard to understand quite where you're coming from on the basis of a single image! Keep on posting!
mrswoolybill Plus
13 2.3k 2276 United Kingdom
17 Sep 2020 1:54PM
Welcome from me too, I hope you'll find the Critique Gallery useful.

We are all singing from the same hymn sheet here - we really need to see that Exif. If you are using 'Save for web', please don't for critique uploads as it wipes the data from the file.

The shot is nicely timed, a big plus; but it's unsharp, and noisy. I suspect a combination of too slow shutter speed, high ISO and a crop.

The tilt has been commented on - with any shot involving water surface and / or reflections, it's important to check against the grid - NB reflections always drop down vertically from the subject, no matter what angle they are viewed from.

The picture here was really the reflection, I would want to angle the camera down a bit. Less space above, more below.
Regards,
Moira

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