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Smoke

By tapas179
Shot while walking about the streets. I am an amateur street-photographer looking for guidance from experts and beginners like me.

Tags: Street photography Black and white Black and white

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Richsr Plus
9 90 220 England
28 Nov 2012 3:49PM
A good candid capture, for me the you could crop this in from the rhs to take out the bright area on the rhs, or tone that area down as it draws the eye
Regards Richard

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banehawi Plus
11 1.4k 3426 Canada
28 Nov 2012 4:34PM
Welcome to Ephotozine Tapas.


This is an excellent candid shot. The detail, eye contact and expression of the man are all very good. It was not possible to capture some of the actual smoke from the cigarette I think because if the light background behind, - would have been even better.

I agree with Richard regarding removing some of the space on the left, - it does works quite well as it is, but may work better with some cropped, simply dues to the object there that can draw the eye. Your mono conversion is excellent.


I have uploaded two modifications, - just scroll up to the modifications tab and click it. Both have the crop, and the second is a duo toned conversion.


I hope this is helpful, and enjoy the site,



Regards

Willie
Focus_Man 6 481 631 United Kingdom
28 Nov 2012 5:10PM
Welcome from me too Tapas (I thought you must be Spanish when I first saw your name) a nice portrait but a bit cropped of the RHS would be nice. Good differential focussing from a nice lens. As Willie mentions, some nice curly smoke would be nice (Unless you are the PC brigade from UK) but you portrait is a very good example of street photography.

Frank
NEWMANP Plus
8 1.6k 574 United Kingdom
28 Nov 2012 10:32PM
really good character study and i like the use of negative space out on the right side but the background is maybe not so complementary, the bokah isnt particularly attractive and there are some quite bright highlights that distract from the excellent face (which isnt static and is doing something)

love that expression, think he is really enjoying that smoke
Phil
paulbroad 8 113 1021 United Kingdom
29 Nov 2012 4:52PM
Very nice indeed. You know your stuff. There are several images here and, indeed, you could crop the right. However, I don't find the lighter areas too bright at all and rather like your letterbox approach to a street portrait.

Keep it up. Want to see more.

Paul
parob Plus
5 3 74 France
3 Dec 2012 5:09PM
OK, I recognise your style from other shots in you gallery. You are talented, to be sure, but you should not confuse portraiture with street-photography, which it isn't because you have caught the subject's attention. Consequently, this becoming a portrait, the subject should be positioned differently, this is why other members suggest quite rightly a crop. The exposure compensation and other settings work well for this type of capture, though I see a very strong highlight on the left-side of the head. Furthermore the neck region remains too dark (necks are not to be missed). The eyes, obviously looking at you, bother me a bit, especially the left eye that may suffer from a cataract. If this is the case, the head should be turned very slightly to avoid the defect (at least as a kindness to the subject). I say all this because there is a lesson to be learned. Street-photography hinges on short bursts of time, portraiture, on the contrary plays counts on time. For instance, in another shot of the same person, you might have caught some of the smoke, as suggested by Willie. Whatever the case, we must conclude that nothing must be taken for granted in a photograph for fear of having it become a snapshot, to be avoided at all costs (dixit Umberto Eco).
Paul
Paul Morgan Plus
15 18.0k 6 England
7 Dec 2012 9:35PM

Quote:Whatever the case, we must conclude that nothing must be taken for granted in a photograph for fear of having it become a snapshot


A snapshot is merely a moment captured in time, your confusing snapshots with poor photography, there totally different beast Smile

There`s a lot of out of focus empty space on the right, by all means include this but have it in focus, this adds interest to environmental street portraits and street photography like this.

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