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Sound and Mind

By shoguntofu
Taken also with a mobile phone. Also from a funeral service. Minimal effects added using glamour glow in Snapseed.

Tags: Black and white Black and white photo

Comments


pablophotographer 9 1.6k 380
5 Jul 2020 12:41AM
Well, it surely made some sound.
The composition works for me. Quirky framing of the subject makes it different from the norm. The rest... it seems to be your signature style. And for that reason I would say this should have been uploaded in the main gallery and even be allowed to be voted.
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chase Plus
14 1.7k 419 England
5 Jul 2020 10:49AM
This made me smile with the instrument covering the mans face.
Again, very contrasty and a slow shutter speed.
The glow you have applied covers some of the movement and noise here, even so, could do with the heavy shadows lifting a touch.
Composition is ok although a little cluttered.

I did manage a very quick mod.
Lifted the darker areas using a levels adjustment in Photoshop.
Removed the very bright triangle top left with the clone tool.
Added a frame which has the effect of lightening the scene.
Converted colour profile to sRGB.

It would be good to have some feedback from you and perhaps the original image before you did any post processing.
mrswoolybill Plus
13 2.2k 2248 United Kingdom
5 Jul 2020 11:19AM
Much the same comments apply here as yesterday's - well this was taken on the same occasion, with similar light conditions.

Again, your eye for a strong composition carries this. It's witty, quirky, original. But again it is underexposed. The bell of the instrument is the subject, it stands in for the man's face, we need to see its surface properly, but it is in darkness. And this one suffers even more than yesterday's from the very slow shutter speed. 1/10 second is simply too slow for hand-holding steadily, and too slow for a living, breathing, twitching subject. There is subject movement and camera shake here.

The word photography means drawing with light. You need to understand light, what it does, how it can help you, and you need to try to work with it rather than against it. You know what you want to achieve I think, you need to study how to achieve it.

I've uploaded a modification, with the same adjustments as yesterday - exposure increased, shadows lifted, a bit of dodging and burning.

Are our comments helping you? What are you looking for from the Critique Gallery? We are rather working in the dark at the moment, which is appropriate for your images but not easy and not necessarily productive!
Moira
dudler Plus
17 1.2k 1682 England
5 Jul 2020 11:40AM
As yesterday, but more so!

Creativity like this deserves a sound technical base - whether with a camera, or in better light.
dark_lord Plus
16 2.6k 684 England
5 Jul 2020 4:59PM
You have an interesting angle and composition, which is effective, ma more so by Janet's cropping.
Did you darken this down? Darkness in an image can work well but not if it obscures the subject and relevant detail to the extent the viewer loses interest quickly.
I wonder if editing on a bright phone screen means when viewed on a properly set up and calibrated screen the results appear too dark.

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