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By jflanza
Im a strret photographer biggener so pls i would like to see what you think of this photo.thanks

Tags: Street Chinese People Valencia Steps Rule of thirds

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davetac 12 69 2 United Kingdom
23 Sep 2019 9:32AM
Good observation. The shadow would have been more prominent at another time and though it's a shame she's leaving rather than entering the Frame I appreciate the shadow in that case would have been lost altogether. What camera and film are you using and do you process your own?
cymru2019 2 17 7 United Kingdom
23 Sep 2019 10:36AM
I believe this is an excellent observation and has been well photographed and looks really well in mono. The only slight criticism is that the shutter speed chosen could have been a little faster to freeze the action. I agree it is a good idea to show what camera and lens have been used by the author, and what settings have been chosen. David
hobbo Plus
10 1.7k 4 England
23 Sep 2019 10:43AM
An excellent Street image, well seen and well presented.

My only comment is, that if you shoot in RAW, you could pull out many more tonal values....there are areas here too.

https://youtu.be/XPp6JGClOcE

Hobbo
clevercloggs Plus
17 251 15 Netherlands
23 Sep 2019 10:56AM
The image does stand out in the gallery which is a good thing.
Composition wise i can see a triangle from her feet to her head and then to the left as a result of the curvy steps.
You then have the slithers of bright lights from the risers of the steps in the upper half of the image. adding an extra viewing point to the image
I do like the tight crop, i assume it is defined by the height of the person, your subject and focuses the attention on the subject.

Would you have taken the image with RAW, you could indeed have had a more broader tonal range and we could have seen some detail in the back pack the lady is wearing. The overall toning is fine too.
Overall a pleasant image to look at. Well done.
chase Plus
16 2.2k 578 England
23 Sep 2019 6:06PM
An image nicely observed.
However, without the exif data and your reason/s for requesting critique is really essential here and would help us immensely.
If you could give us some more information, then it helps us to help you.
pamelajean Plus
15 1.6k 2237 United Kingdom
23 Sep 2019 7:44PM
Welcome to the Critique Gallery, Joseph. I see this is your first venture here.
You arrived here because you checked the "Critique Wanted" option. I assume that was your intention.
This is the part of the site where you can't get votes or awards (as in the main gallery), but you can be pretty sure of focused and constructive comments on your pictures.

This is extremely well observed. I like your placement of the girl over to the right because it looks as if the steps are waves rippling along behind her as she walks away. In this case, composition rules can be successfully broken.

I have done a modification, leaving your frame as is, but attempting to get a bit more detail on the girl, though I wasn't overly successful because she has the light coming in front of her, hence the lovely shadow on the steps. I removed the part step top right and a few bits of rubbish from the ground. I brightened the whites to make more of those strong curves.

A lot of impact here. I think it would do well in the main gallery.

Pamela.
banehawi Plus
17 2.5k 4263 Canada
23 Sep 2019 7:45PM
We do need your shot details/exif data to give you the best possible feedback.
dark_lord Plus
17 2.8k 784 England
23 Sep 2019 8:04PM
Welcome from me too.

The person is s touch soft, and looking closely I think it's a focus issue rather than shutter speed, so we do need to see the exif details in order to provide relevant feedbac. You can find these details by right clicking on the image in Explorer and selecting Properties. You can post them as a comment if you wish.

It would also be helpful to describe how you converted this to mono, and for Critique Gallery purposes if you could post the colour original as a Modification, for comparison.

A nicely captured moment well suited to mono.
paulbroad 14 131 1293 United Kingdom
24 Sep 2019 7:59PM
The initial impact is quite good, but then you start noticing things. The girl needs to be sharper and compositionally placed to the left of the frame - she is walking out of it.

The tones in the concrete steps are a touch weak. I would darken the whole image a bit then bring the figure back with the dodge tool.

Lack of EXIF data is a problem.

Paul
24 Sep 2019 9:40PM
i used Nikkon D7000 lens 18-105 Nikkor f8 iso 800
24 Sep 2019 9:43PM
Thanks for all your comments really appreciated
dudler Plus
18 1.7k 1877 England
25 Sep 2019 11:06AM
And welcome from me, too, Joseph.

It's always best to use 'Save as' to allow the image to carry the EXIF data - it goes way beyond camera and lens, including mode, aperture, shutter speed and so on.

I like this - the unexpected composition works well, and monochrome suits the graphic nature of the image.

However, the technical quality isn't perfect, and there's little excuse for that in bright sun - I wonder if the AF mechanism locked onto the steps beyond the woman, rather than on your subject. So an important question is how you set your AF... Single point? Let the camera work it out?

The more information we have, the more we can help you with our comments.

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