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still life

By jeanlynch
Please criticise.. I am just starting. I'm trying for good composition, good quality, interesting subject. I now have elements 10 and should be able to correct errors. I am only just learning how the camera works and how to adjust it for each shot. This was taken with automatic setting before I had elements.

Tags: Digital art Flash and lighting

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puertouk 4 1.1k 17 United Kingdom
4 Jul 2012 2:00PM
Hi Jean, it's a nice shot, but I'm afraid your image has too much shadow and it detracts from your main subject. You need to have some lighting to the rear or maybe try bouncing your flash off the ceiling to remove the shadow. You can also purchase a Off Camera Flash Extension TTL Shoe Sync Cord. By holding the flash in your hand and then taking the shot. Try various heights and distances away from your subject until you get the desired effect. I have put your image into Photoshop and adjusted the background to remove the shadow. Hope this is of help.
Stephen

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55jase Plus
10 188 2 United Kingdom
4 Jul 2012 5:57PM
Hi jean I really like the shadows and feel this works as you have all the shadows in the shot. I feel this was your intention due to the angle of the shot. The only let down is the flash on the vase.
I have uploaded a mod and had a play with curves.
Jase
pamelajean Plus
10 964 1824 United Kingdom
4 Jul 2012 7:38PM
Hello, Jean, and welcome to EPZ.
There is no need for the "adult" tag, this is reserved for nudes and the like.
You say, "I'm a beginner and need as much criticism as possible", so you have come to the right place.
There are two contradicting comments above, and this is useful because it makes you realise how opinions differ.
Personally, I am in agreement with Stephen, and his modification appeals to me more.
Your Exif data shows that you did not use flash, and I am wondering if this is correct. Flash would account for the strong shadow and also the strong highlights on the glass.
This type of still life can be set up indoors, and I would therefore suggest that you practice until you get the image right, rather than trying to manipulate the image afterwards. When you only have one chance at a shot and haven't got it quite right, that's a different matter. I'm certainly not saying that getting it right in-camera is a MUST, we all make mistakes, sometimes the light is just awful, etc. and editing is extremely useful.
There are quite a few things I'd like to address, and hope you will accept them all as being in the spirit of helpfulness to a beginner.
1. You have chosen attractive roses for your subject, but one is in shadow and another is facing towards the wall.
2. An attractive glass vase would look far nicer than a water jug.
3. The green material is a good choice, echoing the colours of the stems and leaves, but it would be best not to have a pattern on your drape.
4. Your container is central in the frame, and it usually makes a better composition if you offset it in the frame.
Having said all of that, there is something appealing about the randomness of your composition.
I hope some of this is useful to you.
Pamela.
aeras 4 6 Cyprus
4 Jul 2012 9:31PM
Adding my own 2 cents to the above.

1) The light is too harsh and direct , for my liking. Try to diffuse it with tracing paper or similar b2in your light source and subject (maybe adding a reflecting white surface on the left of the composition) reducing contrast and making the glass surface appear even and soft.

2) you could lower your exposure to make the image moody (after reducing the overall contrast)

3) look very closely at your setup before you press the button. your background was set in a harry as one can see the line b2in table and background , and some flowers are inside the water which IMHO is not at all appealing.

Take care

Charles

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