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Sunset on the bench

By Yebach
Watching the sunset

any suggestions on the compostion and color - i think it might be too yellowish

Tags: Sunset Heart Bench Couple Landscape and travel

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pamelajean Plus
15 1.6k 2237 United Kingdom
15 Jun 2021 5:13PM
Hello, Vid, and welcome back to the Critique Gallery.

I remember that you were advised to crop your last entry in order to eliminate unnecessary "dead" space, and I am suggesting the same, but not as drastic as before.

This is a lovely scene. I don't think it's too yellowish, though others might disagree. After all, that's what sunsets are usually like.
I like the misty mountains. Whether staged or not, the couple look cosy and contemplative, and I love that heart shape on the back of the bench...so appropriate. There is also a nice bit of sun hitting the lady's hair, a golden rim, very attractive.

You have placed your sun in the centre of the frame, which is rarely the best place. In my modification I cropped to place it on a thirds line on the vertical (see Rule Of Thirds) and I also cropped off some of the bland sky from the top, placing your "horizon" on a thirds line on the horizontal. The couple are already offset in the frame, so well done for composing in that way.
I brightened the image to bring out some of the nice forground area.

I feel that this suggested crop brings all of the important elements together.

Pamela.
mrswoolybill Plus
14 2.9k 2455 United Kingdom
15 Jun 2021 9:47PM
It's a beautiful image. There are delightful details - the carved heart shape, the light touching the lady's hair, the arm round her shoulder. A bit of me wants to know more, whether it was posed or not... But I'm happy to accept it as it stands. I think it has scope for various stories.

Compositionally it's about balancing two subjects in two different planes. The couple on the very romantic bench in the foreground, the sunset in the sky. The relationship between those two areas is crucial, they both need to be placed carefully in the frame to balance each other. As Pamela says above, placing the sun in the middle of the frame is unsatisfactory - it actually looks weak rather than dominant. It does not command attention, because the straggly foliage at the edges of the frame, particularly creeping in on the right, drags the viewer's eye away.

So I wanted to crop ruthlessly, reduce this to the essentials - figures, sun. Leave a bit of foliage, a few rocks, to give context, tell us where we are; but we are looking ahead at them and the horizon, we don't want to look to the sides.

A square crop to my eye gives intimacy, a sense of a private place. That's important here.

So that's the crop. Other thoughts... it was a tricky exposure, we are not seeing your full Exif but you avoided overexposing the sky at the cost of underexposure on the figures. That can be adjusted.. So some lightening of shadows is really needed, and then I made a Levels adjustment moving the outer sliders.

I don't think it's too yellow, and once light is adjusted slightly that sky really glows!
Moira
dark_lord Plus
17 2.8k 784 England
15 Jun 2021 9:57PM
Welcome back.

It's not too yellow, and in fact in my mod I've warmed the colour balance quite a bit. Your White Balance setting isn't showing in the Exif so I can't be sure but Auto would remove some warmth. The part of the scene in shade looks very blue. I made my adjustment on the whole image but you could make an adjustment on the foregound only and leave the sky if you prefer.

There is some leeway on sunsets as regards colour as each one varies due to atmospheric conditions and even minute by minute as the sun sets, there's no 'correct' seting if you like. How do you rememner it, how would youlike it to look? Those are questions to consider whem processing the image. The thing to avoid is something looking unnatural.

I kind of likethe tree at the edge as a frame, but it's looking more like an intrusion.
So I'd include more so it looks as though it belongs in the image. In my mod I cropped it out becaue of that and because there's quite a lot of featureless area there and the result places the sun off centre which then balances with the couple on the bench being off centre a little the other way.

I lifted the shadow area a little and boosted contrast, using a Curves adjustment, it boosted the presence of the couple.
And you do have some nice rim lighting on them.
banehawi Plus
17 2.5k 4263 Canada
15 Jun 2021 10:53PM
If you used Auto WB its not warm enough. How you perceive it will be very much dependant on what your using to view the image, - tablet, hone, laptop, monitor, etc. Something that calibrated will be most accurate.


The mod has a daylight balance, cropped and the level of black reduced to obtain more solid dark tones, and better contrast.

Its a nice shot, lovely scene.

Regards


Willie
dudler Plus
18 1.7k 1877 England
16 Jun 2021 2:49PM
Coming to this late, others have said it all. A tighter crop is good! So is warmer. And the same is true of full EXIF data...
Yebach 8 Slovenia
23 Jul 2021 1:57PM
Thanx for the reviews

I usually use AWB Smile

The image was parially set up since it is me and my gf on posing on timer settings therefore it is kind of random positioning etc. I could set for the rule of trird in LR but I also wanted some hill on the right side.

Sometimes I like to put stuff on the side of the images.

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