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The helpless.

By PradyothChakraborty
The Guard. I will rather call him 'caretaker' , not a guard. This low paid old man stayes in the graveyard, cleans it. I have taken three shots of him (for that I had to pay a few bucks to him ). I paid him out of charity of course in exchange his looks that matches the enveronment where he lives can be shot. Yesterday, I have uploaded one , today I am uploading one and tomorrow also I will upload one. It is on my critiques how much points they give to me. ( Am I really getting on the nerves of my Critiques? if so please excuse me, I have no other option to be criticised on my works.)

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NEWMANP Plus
9 1.6k 574 United Kingdom
21 Jun 2011 3:55PM
the one thing that would have conveyed the mans emotion would have been direct eye contact with the eyes zinging sharp. look at the eyes on the next image in the gallery and you will see what i mean. its the most important thing in any portrait. the forehead is the sharpest area and although it brings out the lines in the skin, it also enhances the over bright area on his temples.

the beard too is overexposed and could have been full of bristly detail. its still a great shot but the eyes dont sing out as they could have.

Phil
pamelajean Plus
11 973 1871 United Kingdom
21 Jun 2011 4:40PM
Hello, Pradyoth. I see that this man's shirt is blue in this image, whereas I thought it was white in your last upload. This is a bonus because, as I said, it's too easy to burn out whites. Did you consider portrait/vertical format for this one? This way, you could have included the top of his hat. I notice that you have not placed him central in the frame, which is good, and you also have him against the stonework, with no distractions. He looks a bit menacing to me, and I don't mean that in a derogatory way, it's probably just because you have told us where he works. He may, of course, adopted this look for photographers. I agree with Phil about the eyes being important in a portrait, and in this case I feel that the darkness of the eyes adds to the eeriness of this character. I think that if you titled this "The Graveyard Keeper" (which isn't obvious to anyone seeing him for the first time, without any description), bright shiny eyes might not depict that so well. You have him looking directly at you, and that's good , and I don't disagree that the eyes could be sharper.
I am glad you paid him for the pictures.
You are certainly not getting on my nerves.
Pamela.
Thanks a lot Frank, Phil and Pamela. Actually I wanted to give the dilapidated wall of the house as back drop of a broken man. Yes, now I ofcourse, realise that if I have used a larger aperture I could have conveyed my idea in a better way. However, I will do it next time. Also get ready for an anothr upload of same man tomorrow.
Paul really you have done a splendid job. Would you kindly tell me how have done the miraculous changes, used curve or other tool?
banehawi Plus
12 1.5k 3599 Canada
21 Jun 2011 10:55PM
Its a good shot, and a very good expression. Do remember to hold the camera vertically for portrait shots as Phil mentions.

The beard doesnt not look right for me, - too blue, while it should be white, and would be OK too bright I think.

the eyes could have a little more exposure, - think about using a fill flash, - that is set up your shot as you have, and just manually pop the flash, - it will give just enough light to lift shadows and give some nice catch lights in the eyes.

I have loaded a mod with these suggestions, and also cropped to place the man off centre,



regards



Willie
paulbroad 9 123 1125 United Kingdom
23 Jun 2011 9:24AM
This is a fine portrait showing his situation in his eyes. It is a good stop under exposed making evreything very dark and heavy. The darkness actually helps, but you do need to lift his eyes a bit. A touch of the brightness tool and a quick use of the dodge tool I think.

Paul

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