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The sun.

By Rudranath
Natural scenery from roof.

Tags: Trees Towers Wildlife and nature Before sunset DISH TV

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dudler Plus
18 1.7k 1877 England
12 May 2020 1:18PM
Really, we need to know what you think of this - otherwise, we can't offer that much comment.

I note that this is tilted, and there's a lot of blank blackness on the right.
chase Plus
16 2.2k 578 England
12 May 2020 1:33PM
Hi Rudranath,
Welcome to the Critique Gallery.
We do need some information from you as John has said.
Do you like this image ?
What made you take this image ?
Have you done anything to this ?

As I see it, this needs straightening, that pylon has a big lean.
There are lots of artefacts here, on the sky and surrounding the dark palms.

From what I see and without more information from you I have done a modification.
I straightened the pylon.
Removed the light artefacts around the Palm leaves with the clone tool set to darken.
Lightened to see some of the leaves and a little more of the satellite dish.I added some birds to the empty part of the sky.
Removed some noise in the sky.
Tidied up with a crop generally.

Now you need to answer some of the questions and give us some more information, them we can help you much better.
mrswoolybill Plus
14 2.9k 2455 United Kingdom
12 May 2020 1:38PM
Welcome to the Critique Gallery Rudra, I thought that Somnath might send you here...Wink

It would be good to know how you see this, what you were trying to capture. But looking at this without that information, I'm seeing the makings of a good composition.

You were photographing looking towards the sun, and that bright light in the sky tricks the device's 'brain' into underexposing. It's very effective, but I do wonder whether it was deliberate, did you realise the effect it would have, in creating silhouettes?

Two important points: I suspect that it's a scene were nothing is perfectly straight, but looking into the shadows bottom left, where there is a structure of some kind, I think this needs to be rotated clockwise to get the smaller more central mast vertical.

Secondly, silhouettes can give wonderful atmosphere and character, because they leave so much to the viewer's imagination. Hints rather than instructions... But that satellite dish is a real problem. Just enough visible to be annoying, without being enough to contribute to the composition.

Something else: this frame is 6 x 5, very close to square but not quite. A true square would be tauter, neater, more contained.

I guess you know that by ticking the critique box you enable members to download the image to modify it. I'm off to do some work. Rotate, get rid of the dish, crop to square, strengthen the silhouette contrast. And then maybe black and white...

Modifications will appear under the blue Modifications button below your upload.

I hope you are enjoying the site. Remember that the more you tell us, the more we can tell you.
Regards,
Moira
dark_lord Plus
17 2.8k 784 England
12 May 2020 1:59PM
Welcome from me too.

You've made nice use of the silhoettes.
It would be helpful to have some input from you, your thoughts on this image and its capture.

Moira meanwhile has given you very good feedback.
While I can't add to that, the two things that make this fall down are the tilt (we know that masts are vertical and so expect to see that) so you need to be careful when you capture the image or be prepred to correct it later, and the oversharpening which has created the halos around the edges of the silhouettes (pay close attention when post processing and/or your capture settings).
banehawi Plus
17 2.5k 4263 Canada
12 May 2020 6:51PM
Welcome Rudnarath, we have been expecting you!

Some basic errors in this you can learn from. First, vertical objects in the frame should be vertical in the image, - if the Xiaomi Redmi has am on screen guide (lines) use it.

Next, shooting into the Sun will always produce a very dark image, This is often desirable, however, in this case even the Sun is underexposed; if you have the means with this phone camera, increase exposure to about +1, especially as the Dish TV is a desired feature.


I have added mod 4 with this done, and also I have used a warmer white balance.



Regards



Willie
13 May 2020 6:14PM
I am an amateur photographer who likes to capture vibrant shades of the almighty nature through my smartphone.
This photo has been taken as the sight made me capture the beautiful landscape. Many many thanks to all of you for your support , comments and modifications.
GeorgeP 14 62 26 United States
17 May 2020 3:10AM
I really like this image – especially the modification by Willie (banehwili). My first impression is of the approaching sunset – with the oppressive afternoon heat just beginning to moderate. That ancient unchanging daily rhythm is there in the setting sun, the diffused orange sky and the green palm trees. But nothing stays the same and we have the two antennae and that dish bringing us forcefully into the twenty first century.
The previous critiques have covered all the technical corrections so I don’t need to add anything. My only recommendation is to keep that camera close by and keep shooting. Also, since nobody seems to print manuals these days, I have found it helpful - necessary - to check the web to learn how to modify the auto settings on my cell phone. I recommend it. GrinGrin

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