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Thinking Outside The Box

By Jasper87  
There's a first for everything! I came out of London Bridge Station and saw this guy standing in front of the tel. box studying his mobile. The scene shouted black and white in colour. Then he started to walk away so I snapped him anyway and I'm not sure whether it works as a 'street image' or not ('street' and people are not something you would associate with my pf!). I like the movement. I like the direction to the left and out of screen - tension. I like the mobile v. the kiosk. I like the shade on his eyes taking the focus of the image away from the guy. I particularly like the face of the poster girl coming through the phone box window. I don't like the blue awning and other bits of extraneous colour apart from the posters. There is also a question of the story and what is he intent on doing...finding a person, a place or what...

Okay, I know I have probably written my own critique but the question I guess is does it work? Is it tooo cliched? If it was put before Rankin on his TV photographic show would he say too safe, too cliched or what.

Tags: Street Telephone box

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dudler Plus
18 1.7k 1877 England
14 Jun 2021 9:10PM
I reckon that's a decisive moment all right. As you say, tension - shoes and shadows so nearly out of frame, but perfect. The echo of the phone box shadow on the left. The way the man's stepping away from the box, but still attached at this 1/440 of a second.

And his stance is so beautiful, purposeful but indecisive - more tension!

In the main gallery, I'd be eyeing this up for an award, to be honest.

My only suggestion is a fraction of a crop at the top... To match the precision you have on the other three sides.
mrswoolybill Plus
14 2.9k 2457 United Kingdom
14 Jun 2021 9:33PM
I like it as a portrait of British diversity. As street photography, it's a bit cramped for my taste, I'd like more breadth, more context. More street... Particularly on the left, for him to walk into.

It's good to see you around, I thought you had abandoned us!
Moira
chase Plus
16 2.2k 578 England
14 Jun 2021 9:58PM
This did make me smile, walking in front of a phone box with a mobile phone and face mask in hand, well captured.

Your camera settings look sensible given the time of day, his light coloured hat is perhaps just a tad over.
I too would have liked more surroundings, perhaps landscape format would have worked ?
Cliched, I don't think so although I would have liked to have seen him walking the other way, into the future, to the right with his up-to-the-minute mobile in hand.
banehawi Plus
17 2.5k 4263 Canada
14 Jun 2021 10:27PM
Nice timing.

Slight CW rotation, warmer WB and a little contrast in the mod.

Well done


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saltireblue Plus
11 12.2k 76 Norway
15 Jun 2021 8:38AM
Very much an image of today - now. The mobile phone versus the old-fashioned phone box. The fact that the gentleman and the box are both black - black lives and phone boxes matter?
As others have said, a wider lens would give added context, but as you had no time, it acts as a fine message for those prepared to see the details in the context of life today.
And I do like the very appropriate text on the blue parasol - 'never miss a moment'. You certainly didn't.
mrswoolybill Plus
14 2.9k 2457 United Kingdom
15 Jun 2021 8:50AM

Quote:I too would have liked more surroundings, perhaps landscape format would have worked ?

I'm just going to add a further point here - there's a reason why landscape is often seen as the classic format for street photography. It's that landscape directs the viewer's eyes to explore horizontally, which is how we look around in the street. It keeps our interest at street level. Whereas portrait leads the eye upwards, away from the real action.
Irishkate Plus
11 45 121 United Kingdom
15 Jun 2021 10:40AM
The bit I want to remove is the football poster.
Otherwise it gels.
KateGrin
TrevBatWCC Plus
13 13 19 England
15 Jun 2021 11:15AM
Welcome back to EPZ Dave, after about a 12 month break! 😃 Works for me, and I like the idea of mobile versus the old phone kiosk. I do find the bright blue awning rather eye-catching, especially it being so large, so would have muted the colour. I like the girl on the poster peering at you through the kiosk too 😀👍
Trev 😀
Jasper87 Plus
11 2.8k 158 England
15 Jun 2021 7:10PM
Thanks all. Lots of interesting comments and food for thought. The bottom line seems to be use a widish angle and in landscape mode then crop for effect.

Cheers.
CaroleS Plus
11 442 3 United Kingdom
16 Jun 2021 10:14AM
Well timed, just the light tones a tad 'blown' for me.
Carole
LynneJoyce Plus
13 22 101 United Kingdom
16 Jun 2021 6:41PM
Lovely, sharp image, great title.
jaktis Plus
17 84 Sweden
24 Jun 2021 2:26PM
Lots of details

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