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Three

By dusfim
Photo was taken during one of our monthly walks in villages and towns which the society organize.

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alistairfarrugia 4 164 88 Malta
25 Mar 2013 8:39PM
I think a more apt name would have been Two and a Half Man, but you would risk getting sued! This is interesting and original, with the only thing bugging me is the fact that the vertical lines are slightly tilted. It seems it's the structure itself that wasn't straight though, as the horizontal line is quite straight looking to me, so it's not a question of rotating the image as it would offset the horizontal portion.

Well done! Was this shot in Malta?

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dusfim 6 Malta
25 Mar 2013 8:52PM
Yes it was shot in Malta in Ghaxaq. Thanks for your constructive critique. In my opinion the center vertical line is straight of you compare it with the frame, but I accept your critique. Dusfim
alistairfarrugia 4 164 88 Malta
25 Mar 2013 9:03PM
So, I've loaded this in an editor and noticed that the verticals on the far left are tilted, whilst the two in the middle are almost perpendicular to the horizontal line at the bottom, with the right-most vertical line being just slightly tilted (key word here is slightly). I think I noticed the tilting more given that if you move your eyes from left to right, you start off with the area where the verticals are tilted, and by inference you perceive the middle ones as being tilted as well. As I said though, this is not because the photo was taken at a tilt, but because the subject itself was tilted, and I don't think it needs correcting actually. It simply stood out a bit, though at the same time it adds character I guess.

One more thing, have you considered giving this the mono-treatment? There are some nice textures here and taking away colour can only bring them out more!
NEWMANP Plus
8 1.6k 574 United Kingdom
25 Mar 2013 9:05PM
i love the subject and the textures are great but i wonder if the main interest is in the panel with the figures and if a stronger shot would have resulted from a tighter crop with vertical format on just that board. im finding the panel on the base distracting a little.

its a great idea but i think simple though it is it needed a considered approach to the composition
Phil
alistairfarrugia 4 164 88 Malta
25 Mar 2013 9:13PM
Uploaded a modification in b/w myself actually. I've forgotten to add a further detail. Cropped off a bit from the image as I tried to fix the tilting I was referring to by using distortion correction tools in Paint Shop Pro (vertical perspective correction). The lines look more vertical to me now so there's less of a distraction for those like me who nit-pick on these elements! Wink

Finally, I think this can work in a different composition too as Phil suggested, though I quite like this approach as it gives more information on where the three men were sprayed, whilst isolating them might lose out on this element. I don't know though - maybe a mod would help Phil? Wink
mrswoolybill Plus
9 950 1480 United Kingdom
25 Mar 2013 9:19PM
First off I love this, I rather wish that awards weren't disabled! It's the fact that those ghostly stencilled figures are on a layer of paint which is peeling away, so they will gradually disappear from view.
The textures and tones are beautiful - paint fades to such subtle pastels. There was enough directional light to give shadow to show up the textures but not enough to kill the colour. I remember a member who specialises in this sort of subject said a while ago that the test of a peeling paint image is when you feel you could scrape it off the monitor screen - this passes.
The 'vertical' on the left is a bit distracting but basically this is a structure that probably doesn't have a single true right angle to its name. So I would go with Alistair's perspective adjustment but keep the colour. I might look at a crop though. A Mod will follow...
Moira
mrswoolybill Plus
9 950 1480 United Kingdom
25 Mar 2013 9:32PM
I've uploaded a quick Mod. I've tried to give two true verticals, plus a tighter crop keeping the original proportions - just so show a simpler composition as an alternative. I looked for a square crop but didn't like the results.
I also set the Burn tool to shadows, 4% exposure and a large brush size, and simply swept it over the screen. That adds to the 'scrapablity' factor for me, makes the peeling paint more tactile.
Cheers,
Moira
alistairfarrugia 4 164 88 Malta
25 Mar 2013 10:03PM
I love Moira's mod as well. Truly a picture worth playing with! Wink Good job Mario.
NEWMANP Plus
8 1.6k 574 United Kingdom
25 Mar 2013 10:17PM
id love to do a mod but ive been without photoshop for near 2 weeks whilst my computer is repaired sorry but im using a borrowed laptop right now
Phil
ErictheViking 3 124 102 Scotland
25 Mar 2013 11:31PM
Alistair is right about the B+W mod however this image also needs some colour to bring out the detail. In my mod I have merged a B+W layer with the colour layer and then reduced the opacity of the colour layer to 65% this keeps the colour although it is muted and allows the B+W layer to show off the detail in the wood.

Erik Grin
derrymaine 3 17 Greece
26 Mar 2013 5:53AM
black and white would work I think, and I would emphasize the texture
dusfim 6 Malta
26 Mar 2013 7:25AM
Thanks to all for your constructive critique and the Mods. Dusfim
salopian Plus
4 2 20 United Kingdom
26 Mar 2013 11:15AM
A fascinating image which is effective in either mono or colour. I would keep the right hand panel as there are three vertical strips of peeling paint on this which match the three figures on the left.

Geoff
salopian Plus
4 2 20 United Kingdom
26 Mar 2013 11:21AM
A fascinating image which works well in either mono or colour. I would keep the right hand panel as it has three vertical strips of peeling which match the figures on the left - this comes out well in Derrymaine's mod.

Geoff
Joline Plus
10 27 53 United States
26 Mar 2013 11:41AM
Of all the mods, I think Mrs. Woolybill has the right idea. This is a great subject, and for me the mono simply detracts from it. That wonderful blue peeling paint is half the beauty of this.
mrswoolybill Plus
9 950 1480 United Kingdom
26 Mar 2013 12:46PM

Quote:the right hand panel ... has three vertical strips of peeling which match the figures on the left

Good observation, I instinctively retained those strips without really thinking why.
paulbroad 9 114 1049 United Kingdom
26 Mar 2013 6:00PM
Very nice. Well seen and recorded. Good tight composition. Centre upright is vertical and I think we worry about verticals too much on occasions. Left slight lean may well be quite natural an is no problem at all.

Paul

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