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Trail to Wonderland

By Hassel3
Image taken at Madera Canyon in Tucson AZ, USA. I tried creating a mood that would pull you into the photo and onto the trail. Which in turn would give you the curiosity of what’s at the end. Critique is welcome.

Tags: Rocks Trails Hot Desert Clouds Cactus Mountains Valley Hills Landscape and travel Leading line

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paulbroad 14 131 1293 United Kingdom
17 Dec 2018 8:20AM
Good image of it's kind. For me, the track leads out of the picture on the left rather than into it. As with so many of this type of image, it lacks something for me subjectively in that there is no compositional focal point.
It requires something or somebody on that track to really create the required effect.

Paul
17 Dec 2018 11:10AM
I think you've achieved your aim pretty well. Did you use a soft-line Grad on the lower half of the picture?... I like the way the light is concentrated on the central band - that helps to pull the eye into the frame and along the trail, as you intended. And I like how the trail disappears mysteriously behind the tree, making me wonder what lies beyond. The different colours of the stones are rather nice too, adding to the general warmth, because despite the threatening sky this feels like a welcoming picture.
No figure on the track? ...Personally I think that's a moot point. The way I see it, it's the viewer who is on the track.
I have no negative criticisms.
banehawi Plus
17 2.6k 4274 Canada
17 Dec 2018 12:25PM
I think it works as you intended. I do believe that the fact the trail disappears behind the tree adds a dimension to this that makes it mysterious, and thats a good thing.
pamelajean Plus
15 1.6k 2238 United Kingdom
17 Dec 2018 7:11PM
Hello, Barry.
It looks like you joined the site 3 years ago and have added quite a few pictures to your portfolio, as well as having entered some of them into competitions. But I think this is your first venture into the Critique Gallery.

You arrived here because you checked the "Critique Wanted" option. I assume that was your intention.
In the main gallery, reached by NOT checking that option, you can receive votes and even awards, but not necessarily constructive critique.

Remember that the more information you give us regarding your photographic aims and intentions, the better. So thankyou for using the Description Box to explain your intentions here.

It also helps us if you respond to critique and indicate which ideas you found helpful. That means we can tailor advice according to your needs and abilities. We like this to be an interactive area of the site.

Now to your picture. Guiding the viewer's eye is an excellent way to pull their attention into your scene. This won't work for every scene, obviously, but you chose a good one here for that purpose.
As Moira (one of our Critique Team) says, 'Every picture needs a way in for the viewer, then an interesting route to follow, then a satisfying point to arrive at'. That last requirement may not be available in your scene, but it obviously would have finished it off nicely if it could have been found. So just a path that pulls the eye through the scene is satisfying and useful. Lines show us direction and distance. It visually links the foreground and background, creating continuity and an added element of depth.
You could consider the tree to be a focal point, and it may well be for some, but my own eye tends to pass the tree and wonder what is beyond it.

A curved line like yours is often perceived as soft, soothing, settling, and relaxing. They can also add a sense of the dramatic and, combined with that moody sky, this may feel that way to some.

Pamela.

dudler Plus
18 1.7k 1884 England
17 Dec 2018 7:39PM
Is there a trail and a subject or not? Some division of opinion there...

It's subtle, but lety's try a couple of things - a left-right flop, as Westerners read left to right, and cropping hte sky, to contain the shot more.

So much is just right with this: it would be tempting to add a subject on the right, though, to make sure there's a starting point for the eye. But should it be a rider heading into or out of the picture? Maybe that depends on which way round you show it...

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