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Train to Shimla

By christopherdavid
I am not quite sure about this shot. I like the subject, but think either the cropping or there is something else i could have done to improve the presentation. (All suggestions gratefully received)

Tags: Photo journalism Transport Portraits and people

Voters: katieb, BarryC123, KingBee and 8 more


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BarryC123 8 43 25 Ireland
4 Oct 2011 10:19AM
Personally, I'd crop right down to just the girl in the open window frame, everything else here is unnecessary.
You've captured a nice expression, and very fine light.
Admittedly that doesn't give any real clue to where she is, but I think that hardly matters here.

It might also be worth trying a B+W conversion - the contrasts would work well.

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KingBee Plus
10 504 2 Scotland
4 Oct 2011 10:26AM
A truly excellent capture. I think it works fine without a crop because as shown here it provides context. A briliant shot in any event. Bob
photophantom 8 108 3 Philippines
4 Oct 2011 10:37AM

Quote:A truly excellent capture. I think it works fine without a crop because as shown here it provides context. A briliant shot in any event. Bob
indeed.
woolybill1 Plus
10 22 68 United Kingdom
4 Oct 2011 12:57PM
I do like this very much for the girl's body language, her expression and the detail retained in the shadow over her eyes.

I don't feel comfortable with the image as-is but I'm hard pressed to explain why. If you don't mind I'll have a go:

Square format is very formal, and the straight lines within this image, the window frame and the painted coach line, share this formality. The effect is reinforced by the black background that you have used in that the edges of the picture are sharply defined. The bottom edge of the window frame, however, is ever so slightly out of parallel with the edge of the picture; this is only significant in that it distracts from the essence of the composition - the contrast between the formality of the setting and the informality of the girls' posture.

That being said, I think you have captured the fleeting moment enviably well. I'd love it in my portfolio!

Bill
bertie1983 5 12 England
4 Oct 2011 4:30PM
love the comp and think you've caught the mood of the scene wonderfully!Smile

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