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twin 'grand' sons

By freda
taken using flashgun..still learning

Tags: Twins Portraits and people

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Lynamick 14 2 31 United Kingdom
1 Jan 2012 9:53AM
Hi,
Two boys and a camera I believe that you are going to be busy.They both have the cheeky look in their eyes that says they are a handful. A few things need attentiod. With a portrait background is so imprtant . A background showing a mans work place adds inforemation, a flower sticking out of someones head detracts from the image. Small things like the little bit of white T-shirt on the smaller boy and the little bit of black sticking out from the small boys arm . The biggest problem is the fact that the image is very flat. I have put up a mod trying to address what I think is wrong also I cropped out a lot of spare space. This is only my way of thinking I hope it will help you enjoy a wonderful hobby.
Michael

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NEWMANP Plus
8 1.6k 574 United Kingdom
1 Jan 2012 3:00PM
hello and a happy new year,

the expressions are nice and the lighting has been sympathetic and not too harsh, looks like it was bounced off a wall or similar and as such you avoided the horrible shadow behind the head that is often seen. you also have a nice catchlight in both sets of eyes and more importantly both have sharp eyes.

its a pity the top of the head is clipped off because there isnt much can be done to recover it now, i usually give plently of spare space and crop afterwards. this shot has too much wasted space on the right and a recrop would easily take care of that.

id suggest toning doen the tee shirt on the left hand and cloning away the little v shaped white patch under the right lads chin.

nice shot though and credit for going mono, the conversion is nice for the skin tones and it helps to take a family snap to another level

best wishes Phil
Jestertheclown 7 7.3k 249 England
1 Jan 2012 8:08PM
I'll go along with all of the above!
I think that the shot's slightly underexposed which has left it looking a little flat.
I've uploaded a mod. in which I've adjusted the levels, pulling ther right hand slider in to meet the histogram and used the "shadows/highlights" tool to brighten the bright bits and add some contrast.
Also, I've cropped it to remove most of thr RHS and although I haven't done so, as the others have suggested, I'd clone the white bits of tee shirt and what's left of the plant on the right.
Those two boys make excellent subjects and you've captured them well.
Hope this helps.

Bren.

. . . and a happy New Year!

Edit, looking at the mod., now it's uploaded, I should have made the blacks a bit blacker. See my second mod!
freda 4 United Kingdom
2 Jan 2012 8:52AM
gosh, this is my first attemp on this site and i am so pleased with the 3 sets of feedback i have recieved, as you can all guess these 2 are at the moment my fav subject (poor loves), but i am keen to learn the techniques of getting good shots. i have been looking at the each of your feedback and i will certainly take on board each of the suggestions especially the post shot alterations i could do, maybe i should make a start at understanding RAW. Thanks again to all of you for your helpful feedback.

happy new year to you all.

Freda

ps i do take pictures of other subjects and will be putting some on this site, i especially like macro, any suggestions on a good lens for canon 50d?
paulbroad 9 114 1045 United Kingdom
2 Jan 2012 10:40AM
This is very good and first class family work. I must say I tend to leave all my family stuff in colour these days after many years of enforced monochrome. I have no problem with the cropped head, it really doesn't matter and composition is a very personal thing. I regularly crop head tops off - it's the eyes that matter.

I would even crop in much tighter on the two faces, increasing impact considerably. I would also brighten things a bit - just a tiny bit of under exposure.

paul
paulbroad 9 114 1045 United Kingdom
2 Jan 2012 10:47AM
see my mod.

Paul
freda 4 United Kingdom
2 Jan 2012 10:52AM
thanks for this possitive feedback paul, i do have a tendancy to get close to faces and also crop heads, but its a good point about having the option to have it there and crop afterwards.

freda
3 Jan 2012 10:37AM
Welcome to the club Freda, you seem to have created quite a stir already. You must get some of your other types of subjects on in due course for further comments. Best wishes, Dave.
Beautiful boys!
i have played with your image a bit and hope you like the mod Smile
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freda 4 United Kingdom
3 Jan 2012 6:18PM
hi petro, i did like the mod, certainly makes me think about what can be done by using a good photo editor suit and lots of imagination.

regards freda

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