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Up the creek

By pottle
Taken late night with iPhone just looking for composition will return with camera to compare shots

Tags: Creek Landscape and travel

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chase Plus
15 1.9k 479 England
19 Aug 2020 11:42AM
Hi and welcome to the Critique Gallery.
I see you have been around for a while but this is your first venture here.

If it is just composition you are seeking help with today, the very first thing that hits me is the wonky horizon, James has done a mod which addresses that very well.
Not sure about the cut off boat on the right, maybe a crop from there would help.
If you go back with the camera I would possibly suggest a few steps to your right, still including those lovely groynes but excluding the half boat and I suspect that doing so would put the post on the floor in a better position, more on a diagonal.
I like the curves of the water, you could have done with a better sky tbh as, once the viewer is past the two smaller boats, interest stops as there is nothing of real interest on the horizon.
I will have a bash at a mod and see what comes out in the wash.
chase Plus
15 1.9k 479 England
19 Aug 2020 11:58AM
In my mod I..
Straightened the horizon.
Cropped from the right to remove the half boat.
Cropped from the top to put the horizon on the upper third of the frame.
Lifted the shadows a touch in the Camera Raw filter ( Photoshop)
Warmed the scene up using the white balance in, again, the Camera raw filter.
Added a slim frame to compensate a little for the crops.
miptog 15 3.6k 64 United Kingdom
19 Aug 2020 12:22PM
I agree with Chase's compositional comment, and have take the liberty of just doing a 10x8 crop of his, rather good, mod, as I felt that the left of the image was adding no additional value.
banehawi Plus
16 2.3k 4174 Canada
19 Aug 2020 3:33PM
Same comments, and added a mod.

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mrswoolybill Plus
14 2.4k 2288 United Kingdom
19 Aug 2020 5:33PM
It's a good scene for an exercise in composition, first of all, well done for spotting the potential. What makes it camera-friendly is the combination of broad sweeping horizontal interest with strong quirky uprights. Once the horizon is corrected, the angles of the posts become even more interesting!

Watch what is happening on the edges of your frame, because problems there can distract the viewer's eye, lead it against your intended flow. I can live with the emptiness on the left but the cut-off boat on the right is a real pain - and I suspect that by moving a couple of steps to your left you could have excluded it from the frame.

Foreground shadow can be a problem, I would have included less foreground.

Because of the strong lines - the loop of the creek, the posts - I am thinking black & white. Back soon I hope...
Moira
pamelajean Plus
14 1.4k 2164 United Kingdom
19 Aug 2020 5:43PM
A warm welcome to the Critique Gallery.

You will see from the modifications that the image benefits from being warmed up, there being a lot of blue (cold) in your original.

Straightening the horizon should be your first bit of editing, then a crop to the plain sky at the top.

I like the two little boats in the middle, but the half-boat on the right draws the eye and in an unsatisfactory way because it's not complete. Keep an eye out for things intruding into your frame like that and move in order to avoid them.

The curves of the shore are very nice, especiallyalongside the straightness of the posts. I think there are better angles to be had here, so walk around and compose with an eye on those posts in particular, keeping them to one side as you have done here, and not allowing them to obscure the boats at all.

If there's a way to avoid the end of that concrete feature in the foreground, which keeps pulling my eye, and which is ugly compared to the rest of your scene, then I would go for it. Alternatively, the idea of including less, as in the modification that has the crop to the left side, is a good one. It's a big heavy lump set in front of a quite serene scene.

Compositionally, a horizon line looks good when it sits on a thirds line, and here it would be the top line, with the image ending up with one third sky and two thirds sea/land, on the vertical. The alternative, reversing the calculation, would need to have a magnificent sky.

I hope you get back there with your camera and that the sky is co-operative for you.

Pamela.

PS: Moira and I were typing at the same time, and have repeated a few things.
mrswoolybill Plus
14 2.4k 2288 United Kingdom
19 Aug 2020 5:51PM
I've added two modifications. I kept the coldness, it speaks of night time to me; and anyway this was done for b&w! I cropped tighter, placing the horizon on the upper third, and got rid of all traces of the boat on the right; then reduced exposure slightly, lifted shadows, and did some very gentle dodging (on highlights) and burning (on shadows) to give a more 3-D effect in the foreground.

Then a high-contrast b&w, worked in Nik Silver Efex.
dark_lord Plus
16 2.7k 706 England
19 Aug 2020 8:07PM
Welcome from me too.

The first thing that struck me was the sloping horizon. That's always something that needs correcting before upload. Unless there's some technical or artistic reason, and then it should be a concious decision - 'just off' looks wrong.

Mono works effectively here with the lines and textures.
I like the contrast with the poles and the concrete, man-made as against the natural elements and good foregound interest. Not all landscapes are, or need be, the photograpic equivalent of easy listening. That said. Pamela does make a valid point, and the answer is that both points of view can be accommodated and come under the saying 'work the subject' to find different compositions.

Let's see what you come up with on your next visit.
dudler Plus
17 1.4k 1733 England
19 Aug 2020 9:57PM
And welcome from me, as well.

Not a lot to add to the comprehensive comments above. Level horizons are part of what Americans would call Landscape 101, and are particularly obvious in seascapes: you need software to straighten them.

Snapseed is free, versatile, and simple to use on mobile devices.

I look forward to seeing the final version, when you return with your camera. And don't forget that good light is vital - this benefits from low, raking sunlight, and you will get a less interesting effect if you return at midday.

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