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Vulnerable

By Firedragon
I'm really looking forward to everyone's comments and mods.

Tags: Portraits and people

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Comments


IMAGESTAR 15 7 United Kingdom
4 Apr 2009 10:18AM
excellent image.
Brian
banehawi Plus
17 2.5k 4272 Canada
4 Apr 2009 1:46PM
A good effort. She looks more scared than vulnerable to me though.
The hair over they eye leads me to think shes stressed, - perhaps if this wasnt over the eye it may look more vulnerable?

The sheet behind is a distraction and can either be blurred some more, - or the background changed to black.

It can so with sharpening, - remember to do this after you re size.

I like the tilted composition, exposure is good, though a little more contrast can benefit.

Hope this helps,

Regards


Willie
chensuriashi Plus
15 334 18 England
4 Apr 2009 5:54PM
Hi I agree with what Wilie says and think the shoulders should be at 30 degrees too, chin up+ eyes Down, or Chin Down+ eyes up.

Looking forward to seeing more.

Chen.
5 Apr 2009 9:36AM
Brian: Thank you so much!

Willie: The tip about sharpening will be remembered...it makes such a difference...thank you! I'm not very confident about contrast...I think maybe version 2 lacks subtlety. It's something I need to experiment with more. I agree about the backaground. I asked friends and family and they liked the original but I do prefer version 2. Haha...you were very insightful as I was stressed by this point. It took me over an hour to try to get the camera in the right position...I really need a tripod. (I love your portfolio btw).

Chen: Thanks for the tips on posing. I will remember them.
malc_c 15 2 167 England
6 Apr 2009 12:22PM
Hi dragon,

I like your picture... I get the story and yes it says vulnerable/frightened to me, yet I feel it's not quite convincing. Somehow it looks too staged. Trouble is, after a couple of days I still don't know why exactly.

The two things that perhaps niggle me are the hair and the lips.

I think the hair looks too 'deliberately' deranged. Try just shaking your head a few times and seeing how it ends up, and if that's what you did try combing some static into it!

I think the lips are good slightly parted, but somehow the asymmetry of them I find keeps catching my attention, pulling it away from the image as a whole.

Overall though I think you've captured a feeling really really well.

What do you feel about the picture though?

malcolm.
28 Apr 2009 8:00PM
Thanks for your comments Malcolm! I was using the self timer so didn't have a great deal of time to get in position so I eventually was feeling a little deranged (maybe I should change the title lol). I see what you mean about my lips...it's bugging ME now! My hair falls in exactly the wrong place so as to emphasise the deformity.

What do I feel? I'm glad that I gave it go as I've learnt alot form my mistakes. I also would like to remember to take off my jewellery cos my ring bugs me in this shot.

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