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By Alciabides
Sitting at the train station trying to do something imaginative on the way home, put camera on bench and framed a chap waiting. An experiment. 4 sec @ f16 ISO400 40-150mm@40mm

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8 1.6k 574 United Kingdom
11 Mar 2009 10:50PM
its a good idea and more effective than it would have been taken in daylight.

i like the way you have framed the figure within the structure of the bench,

not sure about the sign above the figure, may be better cloned out or cropped down.

i think its worth playing with this idea, you could be on to a winner, it looks as if you have also caught a train zooming through and maybe on a different occasion you could adjust the position of the camera to make more of this in the frame

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ketch Plus
9 770 50 Turks And Caicos Islands
11 Mar 2009 11:02PM
Well its better than framing a chimp I guess! I like this shot enormously and picking up Phil's note the way you have used the bench arm to frame the guy makes this really quite a powerful shot IMO.

I think there is just too much bench fg though and parhaps think about a crop at the break in the pattern. The sign is also a bit of a challenge but it helps to build the context for the image I suspect.

Not too bad for a philosopher...

Best wishes

gary_d Plus
9 576 13 Wales
11 Mar 2009 11:33PM
Not much I can say that has not already been said very well except to say I like this a lot. - gary
Alciabides 8 536 United Kingdom
12 Mar 2009 10:26AM
Thanks to you all, I wait there most days so will try some variations.
12 Mar 2009 10:44AM
For me this is a brilliant picture because of the angle it's taken at,and the subject matter.Very well done.
Eviscera Plus
10 1.1k 149 United Kingdom
12 Mar 2009 6:08PM
Hi David.

This ticks a lot of the right boxes for an experiment !

I like the signs "help" juxtaposition with the guy seemingly on the phone , leaving the viewer to interpret this stark [lace.

As the location has a lot of graphic lines and chaotic shadows , you might want to try an experiment in monochrome and enhance the atmosphere.

I did a quick and dirty mod that attempts to remove the somewhat distracting sulphorous light , corrects your angles (it didnt seem "dynamic" enough a tilt to be effective) and crops the foreground distraction as mentioned.

Subjective stuff , just a thought.

Alciabides 8 536 United Kingdom
12 Mar 2009 7:01PM
Thanks Dave, that gives it a nice French detective film quality - grit and mystery.
pamelajean Plus
10 971 1864 United Kingdom
12 Mar 2009 7:04PM
Hello, David, so glad this has received positive comments, because I think it's an excellent idea and really like the framing provided by the bench and wall, as well as the contrasts of gold and black. Imaginative indeed. I've done a quick modification where I straightened the image using the line of the bench seat, cropped it, adjusted highlights and shadows and added a touch of contrast. I cloned out just a few spots/highlights, too.
Eviscera Plus
10 1.1k 149 United Kingdom
12 Mar 2009 7:20PM
it already had the atmos Wink
Alciabides 8 536 United Kingdom
12 Mar 2009 8:08PM
Really my cup runneth over ...

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