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Water Lillies and A Gold Fish

By Shylo321
Looking for critiques that would help to improve any aspect of exposure, composition, etc.

Tags: Macro Wildlife and nature

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Joline Plus
13 30 56 United States
10 Jun 2015 3:55PM
I find this a pleasing composition. I might crop a bit from the top so the line of the rock makes a firm diagonal line from top to side. Using the curve tool to bring up the mid tones a bit would also be worth a try, but over all I like this.

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banehawi Plus
15 2.2k 4083 Canada
10 Jun 2015 3:58PM
Hi Daniel, welcome to EPZ. I see youve joined recently, so a reminder that this image is in the Critique gallery, where we will do our best to provide constructive feedback, and unlike the general gallery you fore go votes and awards.


This is actually a good image to learn from. BTW, I dont know if your camera time is correct, showing this shot taken at 2:58AM?

140mm is rather a long focal length to use for a shot like this; nothing wrong with that, its simply unusual. People would usually get closer and use a wider/shorter focal length.

That shutter speed is a little slow for 140mm on that camera, a crop/APS-C camera; the effective focal length is actually 140mm * 1.5 which is 210mm, and this would suggest you need to shoot at least as fast as 1/250th, unless the lens is a VR model. But, the image isnt showing any negative effects from the slowish shutter, - which would be seen as camera shake/blurring. This is one reason to take control over the camera by not using P mode, or when using P mode, override the shutter and push it up to the faster speed.

There is one quite obvious issue with the image, perhaps not so obvious to you until its pointed out. Look closely at the image, starting at the bottom, and moving slowly upwards. You will see that just above the fish, the top leaves are focused and sharp, whereas all below is soft. This is caused by allowing the camera to use its default multiple focus points to determine which area to focus on. You want to control this yourself, because, as you can see, the camera decided that the areas above where you probably wanted to focus (the flower) was the best decision, - and it wasnt. Its very easy indeed to control this yourself, and one of the very first things you need to do to get better pics. You can select ONE of the many focus points (the ones that flash in the viewfinder), check the manual, its super simple. The you place that single point on the flower, this tells the camera this is where its to focus, and you have a better shot right away.

I will upload two modifications that will make this in focus area aspect clearer in the image. Both are a little brighter. Scroll up this page, and click the modifications tab to view.

Some of my colleagues will also pitch in and add some mroe comments and information for you.


Enjoy the site


regards


Willie
mudge Plus
17 1.0k 75 England
10 Jun 2015 4:54PM
Mod uploaded
dudler Plus
16 1.0k 1572 England
10 Jun 2015 5:06PM
And welcome from me, too, Daniel.

Willie's said it all on the technical side: to generalise, an awful lot of the advice we give in the Critique Gallery is about taking charge of your camera, and getting it to do exactly what you want, instead of letting it make important decisions about focus, exposure, and colour.

However, if you're really new to photography (you describe yourself as a beginner, but that covers quite a range of people!) you may want to take these one at a time.

This is a very pleasant result: the lack of sharpness doesn't terribly worry me, as it gives a sort of dreamy quality. However, having a really sharp area undercuts this a little.

This is actually all about the flower: and I've done two mods: one cropped a little, top and bottom, to lose some of the less interesting areas, and concentrate attention more on the bloom. I took this further with the second one, and cloned out the fish - it could be a counterpoint, but it would need to be a little more visible than it is here. That's a good argument for taking plenty of shots when you have the chance, and possibly waiting and seeing what develops.

Please say if any of this is using words and processes you're not familiar with.

I look forward to seeing more of your work here soon.
dudler Plus
16 1.0k 1572 England
10 Jun 2015 5:08PM
Apologies - I've managed to upload my first mod twice...

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