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Wild flowers

By Hassel3
Yes, I would like a critique. The main thing I was trying to achieve is to emphasize the extreme contrast between the flowers and mountains/sky.

Tags: Rain Clouds Mountains Valley Horizon Wild flowers Arizona Yellow flowers Landscape and travel Tucson Wipple Observatory

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mrswoolybill Plus
12 1.5k 2067 United Kingdom
16 Mar 2019 2:00PM
I have found this a very interesting image to examine and consider options. I can see exactly what you wanted to convey, the composition recedes from the eye in very distinct planes. The vibrant yellow flowers, the line of tree, the barren mountains, the sky.

You used your longest focal length which has brought the background forward towards the eye, given it importance. Full marks for that. The weakness of the composition I think is the very large proportion of the frame occupied by the yellow flowers. They have vitality and texture, but very little sense of structure. It's a carpet of sameness.

Compositionally the strong point here for me is the row of three trees in the middle distance. They break the pattern of horizontal lines, and they seem to me to divide the here from the there, if that makes sense. So how to create a composition around them that still includes the other elements...

I started by rotating to level the overall effect. I would be surprised if the whole landscape from foreground plain to mountains all lay at the same tilt as you show. That necessitated a small crop. I also made a Levels adjustment to lift highlights, then did a bit of gentle dodging and burning particularly on the foreground textures.

Then I tried three alternative crops. The first is a pano composition, placing the skyline on the upper third and reducing the depth of foreground. A horizontal frame will draw the eye to explore sideways, though, and that is not necessarily what this is about. The other two crops concentrate attention on those three trees, with the mountains behind, and give greater depth to the flowers. Square and portrait frames both allow the eye to explore upwards through the frame.

See what you think.
Moira

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banehawi Plus
15 2.1k 4021 Canada
16 Mar 2019 4:18PM
A wider crop with less on the bottom does work well with this, - Ive uploaded a mod with some minor tweaks. Removed a couple of spots in the sky on the left.

The portrait style crop Moira ha done is worth exploring too, - I think its also a good choice.



regards


Willie
16 Mar 2019 5:40PM
I'm happy with your foreground. It's broken up, here and there, and there are tonal variations, and that's enough to keep my eye moving.

As with your previous upload to the Critique Gallery I think you've achieved your aim pretty well... the only thing I'd take issue with concerns the tree second from left...
In the mountain directly behind it there's a huge lump of rock that's lighter than everything else, and it's really drawing my eye.
Now call me a geological vandal if you like, but as far as I'm concerned, It's Time For A Change...
( I've only rotated it very slightly because it seems the land actually slopes, and the telegraph poles should be vertical )

Alan
dudler Plus
16 897 1507 England
16 Mar 2019 8:00PM
The thing that struck me was that it looks a little tilted...

Moira's first mod is about where I'd be heading, I think, though it's possible to find intereesting shapes on the foreground carpet of flowers.

There's been some work on the original - the sky seems very heavy, and it's not in a straigth line, so I suspect burning in or vignetting. Could we see the original, please, unprocessed?
paulbroad Plus
12 131 1285 United Kingdom
17 Mar 2019 7:46PM
I realise that the large area of foreground is part of what you are trying to do, but I find it taking up half the frame with the same content. To make a more interesting image for me, a strong top and bottom crop to near letterbox has rather more impact.

Paul

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