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Work: Babyshower

By Sone  
Taken on the job for/at a babyshower. I had so much fun with this. Edited in Photoshop Elements.

Tags: General Black and white

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mrswoolybill Plus
10 990 1514 United Kingdom
27 Jun 2013 12:04PM
Very attractively done. I like the way you have thought this out, and used the light.
The only critique that I would make here is that the napkin makes the image a bit top-heavy, and it drags the eye upwards away from the name, which is the important bit. I would prefer the simple reverse-L shape of the plate and glass. So a crop at the top - it will still leave the distant napkins in the image. I might also add a bit more contrast, just for the highlights. Mod to follow, see what you think.
Moira

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mrswoolybill Plus
10 990 1514 United Kingdom
27 Jun 2013 12:10PM
I've added a Mod, looking at it I should have taken just a few more pixels off the top. But you'll get the general idea...
paulbroad 9 117 1075 United Kingdom
27 Jun 2013 3:45PM
It must have been nearly dark for that ISO. A bit over exposed in general and the gross over exposure of the background does nothing for the effect at all. The idea is good, but you needed a more balanced exposure to reduce the huge contrast range and that would not be easy here.

Paul
mrswoolybill Plus
10 990 1514 United Kingdom
27 Jun 2013 4:14PM
Interesting comment from Paul. The exposure is pretty good on the plate and name, which is what matters. Could maybe do with a bit less, but not a lot. The background is how light looks when we are indoors in dim light and squint into bright sun flooding through a window; imagine this in watercolour paints, it looks right.
banehawi Plus
12 1.5k 3555 Canada
27 Jun 2013 9:29PM
Happy Birthday Marcell. Nice idea and effort thats mostly worked.

Assign the sRGB colour profile to the image when uploading to the web, - it doesnt change it, but allows Photoshop an easier time to sort it out.

I agree re top heavy, but as its a mono, just invert the shot, apply a black mask, and paint the napkin with thite to bring back the inverted colour and tones.

Sharpen it a touch more, as well as a little more contrast.

the blown background looks better when blurred more, which is what would be possible if you were to use a large aperture lens, allowing you to shoot at f/2.8. Otherwise its photoshop as done in the mod. View large.



regards


Willie
pamelajean Plus
10 969 1846 United Kingdom
27 Jun 2013 9:36PM
The main elements are on the plate, which you have nicely in focus.
By moving a little more to the left, the wine glass would not sit against the right-hand frame, and would become more of an element, being brought further inside the frame.
The brightness at the top of the image draws my eye, so I have gone for a square crop in my modification, removing that part, which inevitably cuts off the top of the wine glass.
There is something sitting directly behind the glass, which I cloned out, and I also adjusted the contrast.
Not an easy subject with which to get a good composition, but the important elements are there, and you have some nice highlights in the plate, fork and glass, and of course the contrast between china, metal and glass works well too.
Pamela.
Sone 3 2 South Africa
28 Jun 2013 7:19AM
Thank you all for your comments. Wow, the Modifications make a difference, thank you for that as well. *

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