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Yellow

By vaughan80
I was after a photograph that captured an ambiguous emotion. Is the girl crying, sad or just asleep?

Tags: Photo journalism Unusual Interesting Person Sad Yellow Girl Crying Specialist and abstract Coat Asleep Portraits and people Ambiguous

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Tooth 11 5.8k 227 Ireland
11 Apr 2010 3:18PM
I think this is unusual and inventive, and technically very well done with a difficult exposure. Unfortunately I think if you hadn't have included your description I would hardly have been drawn to the girl's (hidden) face or the emotion therein. The reason I think is that the coat and buttons device is just too brash, and I find myself being pulled towards the button instaed of thinking of the girl.

I feel it work better on an abstract level, maybe cropping even tighter and emphasising the bold black shapes against the beautiful yellow of the coat. Either that or if you want to convey thoughts outlined in your description, re-shoot but with a subtler coat so it doesn't overpower the image.

Just my thoughts, hope there's something useful in there

Stephen

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NEWMANP Plus
8 1.6k 574 United Kingdom
11 Apr 2010 9:15PM
hi,
i think it partially achieves the objective you set out for and the exposure is good and the colours and shapes work well.

for me though, im not sure if its a study of the model or just works better an design and is more about shapes and colour.

i dont feel an emotion from the model and there is little trace of the models head. i feel some element of the eyes or mouth may have been somehow included to provide human connection but ambiguous emotion i suppose it is.
Phil
pamelajean Plus
10 969 1846 United Kingdom
11 Apr 2010 10:29PM
Hello, Lawrence. I've been pondering on this for some time, and tend to agree with the above comments. For your idea to work, the girl's head needs more prominence and I think that part of the problem is that her hair is quite dark against the brightness of the yellow sleeve, and the eye tends not to move into the top left corner. I like the way the colour and sheen of the button is echoed in the fingernails. I have done a modification where I lightened the hair, but there is a lot of noise present in that area, and you may have to remove that first. I brightened the image and did a levels adjustment so that the button and nail varnish are more pronounced. The trouble is, those features are eye-catching and the hair is tending not to be so.
Pamela.
12 Apr 2010 11:07AM
Some very helpful feedback here. Thank you all. I might take this again taking the feedback into consideration.

The photograph was perhaps more about composition and shapes / colour rather than emotion itself. To me at least it is just an ambiguous photograph, i think that the emotion is perhaps tagged on.

I have had some noise trouble on the hair when dodging and struggled to remove it on lightroom, so I left it more or less as it is.

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