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Green eyed monster

By ALSFOTOS
Took a close up of my eldest daughters eye then changed it around

Tags: Close-up and macro

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dudler Plus
17 1.2k 1682 England
27 Aug 2014 6:38PM
This is one of those almost-uncritiquable pictures... Following a course that most never try, which is commendable.

The problem is that such a unique view of things is... well, unique. It's far greener than most people would want, for instance: but it would be unhelpful to say it's too green, as you've obviously made it that way for a purpose - to suggest greed (as your title does)? Or just for fun, like distorting mirrors at a fair?

There's not a lot of EXIF data, which makes technical advice hard to give.

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mrswoolybill Plus
13 2.2k 2248 United Kingdom
27 Aug 2014 8:24PM
First of all, could you please add details of the camera and lens, or other device used; (I suspect that this was not taken on a conventionsl camera); and the settings, even if they happened automatically? Either as an edit to the description or as a comment. It is very difficult to say much without this information. The site isn't picking it up - it will possibly have been stripped from the file when you saved it for uploading here.

I'm sure you know where to find that information but for reference, open the picture on your hard drive, right click on it, click on Properties, and then Details.

There's a very clever idea here, but in practice it hasn't quite worked out. Two reasons I think. The image needs to be much sharper. Is this cropped down from a larger file I wonder?

And secondly the addition of heavy toning has considerably reduced the dynamic range, the range of tones from very dark to very light. Toning does that, you need to check the light balance after adding it.

Apart from that, without the Exif data there's not much scope for critique.

Moira
pamelajean Plus
14 1.4k 2149 United Kingdom
27 Aug 2014 8:25PM
I like the concept, Alan, and it's good to try different things.
I wonder what inspired you to produce this.

I see the humour in the "green eyed monster" title, and the colour green is often associated with horror stories, so the spooky element comes through strongly.
But if you wanted to take this idea further, I would suggest that you seek more impact, and try different ideas to make the shot more powerful.

Placing the eye at an unusual angle works, but cutting off a part of it doesn't.
I think that if you placed it on the diagonal in the frame, it would help.
I feel that the eye needs to be a lot sharper, and the catchlight needs to show up more. It has been coloured by the green and its effect has been lost.
The colour of pupils is often the most attractive part of an eye image, but that is lost here.
I'd like to see at least one part of the eye in focus, if not all of it.

Without any Exif Data to go on (this is important in the Critique Gallery), it's hard to comment on your camera settings, to help you get this sharper so that it immediately attracts the viewer's attention.
Was it cropped from a larger picture?

A lot depends upon how realistic you want the eye to be. If you don't then there are various manipulations you can put into play.

Pamela.

PS: my critique crossed with the others, so I apologise if I have repeated some things.
dudler Plus
17 1.2k 1682 England
28 Aug 2014 5:08PM
Of course, we are all free to take pictures of whatever we want, and to process them as we wish.

However, unless you posted in the Critique Gallery by accident, it's a reasonable assumption that you want some feedback on it. We all aim to be honest and helpful - and this can take us into the realms of why a tog has done particular things to a picture, or the thinking behind taking the shot.

The site asks that posters seeking critique give the Team (and others who take the time and make the effort to give feedback) a brief, an outline of what they are looking for from us. That way, we can be more focussed and address the things that you want us to. Without it, we're struggling, and may not be terribly helpful to you.
ALSFOTOS 8 1 United Kingdom
28 Aug 2014 6:30PM
Criticism is a major part of life in many aspects . And I appreciate criticism so I can improve in life . However after my comment , i have come to the assumption that people with the words critique team next to their name , cannot take criticism themselves . They seem to gain these two words and their attitude and meaning in life change . Are we the amatures not allowed to past comment on the comments of a critique without one of their chums rallying behind them with a sarcastic comment . I'm sorry to say that this site is not for me . Let's hope my criticism of this site is helpful .
mrswoolybill Plus
13 2.2k 2248 United Kingdom
28 Aug 2014 6:45PM
I shall add my tuppence worth. We are amateur photographers here - that means we do what we do out of love. Literally. (Latin: amare, to love, amator, one who loves). So we need no reason, not logic for what we do. (I specifically refuse any payment for the work that I do for local organisations because I want to work wholly on my own terms.)

One point that is worth considering though - do you take and process images purely for yourself, or to communicate something to others? Uploading anything anywhere on the internet implies the latter, uploading to a photography website and in particular to the critique Gallery definitely states the latter. This site, and the CG in particular, is about seeing our work through other people's eyes.

If you want advice and help on how to communicate what you want others to see, the CG needs two things apart from the image: the Exif data, because that's the nuts and bolts of what the camera has done; and interaction, communication, as to what exactly you want to achieve, how you see your work, and readiness to see other people's viewpoints, while expressing your own.

All the critique from Team members has been thoughtful, and should be helpful. We are all volunteers and we do this because we care passionately about helping photographers to progress. Really it's for you to decide whether you want to take that up.
Moira
ALSFOTOS 8 1 United Kingdom
28 Aug 2014 9:55PM
My admiration for those who give up their time for free to aid the others . I have done my part in life in voluntary help . We'll done to you all

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