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Ellie-2

By david1810
My 2nd submission of Ellie.

I would love some critique to help me improve my shooting and post processing. I use lightroom 4.

Thanks again to all those who have commented on my previous images. I fing this site a great way to improve.

Dave

Tags: General Portraits and people Nude and glamour

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Comments


I like the light, its softness and low contrast, showing off her lips and eyes dramatically. Her directness, staring at us (and, of course, the lens) makes for a revealing portrait. I quite like it.

Peter

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gwynn56 4 87 England
5 Apr 2013 5:11AM
nice capture Smile
david1810 4 1 Australia
5 Apr 2013 5:19AM
Thanks Peter and Gwynn56

This was taken on my shaded front balcony using natural light.

I have enjoyed using lightroom to enhance the images I shot that day with Ellie and her sister Sarah.

Thanks for taking time to comment

Dave
CaroleS Plus
6 417 3 United Kingdom
5 Apr 2013 9:27AM
A lovely face with direct contact with those beautiful eyes, I like the lighting too.

My monitor shows up a light band running from her bottom lip to chin. I also think if you had changed her head angle to tilting down slightly you would have prevented her neck being quite so prominent.

Carole
cats_123 Plus
12 4.5k 26 Northern Ireland
5 Apr 2013 9:49AM
had a little play in Lightroom Smile
paulbroad 8 114 1034 United Kingdom
5 Apr 2013 1:39PM
Very proficient indeed. Just not sure about the head offset to the right. Think in the middle would better suite this.

Paul
mgts24 5 6 United Kingdom
5 Apr 2013 4:55PM
Really nice shot. Love her eyes, and the fabric. Did you crop the right side at all? If you could include more of her hair I think the balance would be better. Otherwise, it's tremendous! Well done.
garlter 8 1 United Kingdom
5 Apr 2013 6:48PM
Beautiful portrait, fabulous lighting bringing out the models lovely facial features.
5 Apr 2013 9:07PM
Excellent portrait !
George
Robert51 7 7 19 United Kingdom
8 Apr 2013 9:40AM
Super picture Dave.
Hope you like the mod
david1810 4 1 Australia
9 Apr 2013 1:44AM
Thankyou all for your comments and mods. It is great to know I am improving.

Thanks again

Dave
Fogey 3 96 13 United Kingdom
9 Apr 2013 12:01PM
This is a nice shot, bordering on professional. As has been mentioned, the subject being off centre, just doesn't seem to gel, to my eye.

While this image is presented in portrait format, there is a lot to be said for shooting portraits in landscape format and using the placing of the subject in the frame to accentuate the model's look, stance, demeanour, etc.

Well worth experimenting with.
dudler Plus
12 398 801 England
9 Apr 2013 5:46PM
I find this quite reminiscent of Steve McCurry's Afghan Girl picture. Same even, revealing light, and a model looking deep into the lens.

My feeling is that the headscarf justifies the composition on the thirds really well, and provides a counterpoint to the light-toned face.

A symmetrical shot would be good, but a completely different picture, and not necessarily better in this case.

Similarly, a landscape-format shot could be great fro al lthe reasons that Fogey suggests - and would be another shot entirely, again.

Incidentally, the sweeping lines of the smallish areas of the model's hair that are visible add quite a bit to the overall feel of the image.

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