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In memory

By Andy_Curtis    
Tis bench as a plaque dedicated to an old ladies late husband. She leaves flowers every year for him

Tags: General Black and white Flowers and plants

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11 Jun 2014 7:51PM
I like the composition, Andy - good use of colour popping.

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mrswoolybill Plus
12 1.6k 2081 United Kingdom
13 Jun 2014 12:01PM
Well seen, these public tributes carry private stories.

Composition matters: (Oh yes it does... Wink ): Think carefully before placing your subject centrally, it creates a static feel. A bit like a bunch of flowers plonked down into a vase without arrangement. The space to the left doesn't really add anything. Plus, as with yesterday's upload, the softer focus area nearest to the viewer is a bit of a distraction, and here it's not really necessary to the composition. I think there is a stronger L-shape composition to be had from the wand of flowers and the lines of the bench, so I would go for a much tighter crop.

You have managed the selective colour area very neatly, and the technique is quite appropriate here. I dislike its use when it is simply a question of 'Look how clever I am', but here it highlights part of the significant detail, the floral tribute. The yellow ribbon is a bit of hope and love in a grey world. But I would prefer to see the whole wand and its flowers isolated in this way. Is the bow really more significant than the flowers?

There are a number of different possibilities, if you upload the original it will be easier to explore them.
Moira
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14 1.2k 264 England
14 Jun 2014 8:27AM
The yellow ribbon is quite poignant,a lovely tribute to the Lady's loved one.
I do like Moiras' crop,the focus is then placed right onto the ribbon,where it should be.
The SC is nicely done,a good record shot.
dudler Plus
16 954 1521 England
14 Jun 2014 10:07PM
The colour popping is striking, and draws the eye.

Moira's crop definitely works - placing the main subject a third of the way across, and a third of the way up (or down) the frame usually creates an attractive result.

The thought crosses my mind that you may have intended the empty space to signify hte yawning gap in the widow's life. This sort of symbolism can work, but sometimes the idea is more powerful than the visual reality. It's usually a shame to leave a big blank space in a picture - though there is a concept - negative space - that uses an empty area to draw attention to part of the picture. I don't think that happens here, though.

The angle at which you've shot, combined with a wideangle lens and a moderate aperture gives a strong background - this gives a real context for the bench - but if you wanted to focus interest on it more strongly, you could have shot from slightly higher up, isolating it against the grass, and giving a much less busy background.

I saw your comment on your upload the previous day saying that you're new to monochrome, and to street photography. I have a couple of suggestions...

If you shoot with confidence, it's surprising how little people see. And if you ask, surprising how much they agree to!

And for monochrome, you're relying on the shapes, the textures and the tones. Look for them! With electronic viewfinders, if you shoot mono as the primary mode, you will have a good degree of WYSIWYG - and advance warning when contrasting colours in front of the camera merge into simialr shades of grey.

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