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tired

By quengmel
having a break after snowing around....

Tags: General Kids Portraits and people

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achieverswales 12 8 101 Wales
11 Jan 2011 2:55PM

Quote:You are calling this 'Snow' even though your main subject seems to be an 'almost fed up', bored little girl! I guess she could be fed up because she has been waiting out in the cold too long, or because the centre of attention, she, is being usurped by a large red disk masquerading as a sledge! Compositionally, placing two such competing objects at the ends of both the bench and also your picture doesn't work for me, particularly as you main chosen subject is the snow. Could she have sat next to the sledge? Could you have just left the sledge out of the picture?

Agree with above comment, and the feet have been cropped off.

Regards

Trev.
MikeJG 11 22 United Kingdom
11 Jan 2011 3:23PM
My comments would be around the perspective. I would have preferred a shot from an angle with the girl in the foreground wth the sledge behind and some people perhaps in the background, possibly walking away. This would tell a story for me and you could call the shot 'playtime over'.
I note also that the feet and bench are cropped in the original, so would have preferred a wider shot.
quengmel 12 10 United Kingdom
11 Jan 2011 6:40PM
Thanks for the criticisms and suggestions, I just bought our camera last august, so I'm really new to photography. I know I still have a lot to learn about composition and light and all stuff about photography. I usually just take photos of my family and friends and I just want them to look good. i took this photo after the my daughters were done playing in the snow, she sat on the bench and i thought of placing the sledge on the other end of the bench, obviously i didn't really think about her feet being cropped off and the bench as well. But all of this is part of learning and improving.

I like Focusman's modifications, i could have zoomed in and put them both together.
Anyways, thanks for the criticisms and suggestions, I'll do better next time.
banehawi Plus
18 2.8k 4331 Canada
11 Jan 2011 8:55PM
Its quite a nice shot with a few adjustments. First off, the snow is blue, so you need to use positive exposure compensation of +1 or so to shoot into snow. Im attracted by the fact the red saucer is there, and the space between the girl and it.

Move the saucer closer, - I see Franks has had the same idea already, - however I would add a little space at the bottom and give her shoes!


See mod for details,


Hope this helps,



regards



Willie
quengmel 12 10 United Kingdom
12 Jan 2011 11:36AM
Wow, nice suggestions and mods. I really like to learn a lot about composition. I take pix of my family a lot and i want to use the camera well. Thanks guys, im really learning here.
NEWMANP 14 1.6k 574 United Kingdom
12 Jan 2011 11:27PM
hello,
i like the composition and juxtaposition of the red circular shape against the figure on the bench seat. i also really like the way the circles in the hat pick up the shape of the sledge as a nice little extra element

compositionally its very good except it needed a little more space to include the young ladies feet and the ends of the seat. unlike film or slide film digital is better shot with a little extra space to permit cropping and angular corrections in post process.

a little colour correction is needed to correct the blue in the snow but its marginal and easy to do in photoshop.

i wonder if this would make a good mono too

best regards
Phil
quengmel 12 10 United Kingdom
13 Jan 2011 3:04PM
Thanks Phil, appreciate the comments and suggestions. I placed my daughter and the disc at opposite ends because it's kinda like my daughter was saying "get away from me, i'm tired, need to take a break". Obviously being a newbie, i really didn't think about her feet and the whole length of the bench.

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